by Ashson
Your use of the "ten minutes" was repetitive. And it all kind of had a... Fake feel to it. It was very slow to start and you kind of ruined any feeling of depth to the story due to the beginning. It was hard to get into. Better luck next time! :)
I like your style but not all your stories. This is a winner please continue this could be a interesting series. Thanks for sharing.
I would have liked more details in the sex, and about the spanking too. Details make me cum, as it is, it just made me good and wet.