by Red_Jakal
Well told but badly written. There is a difference. I keep hoping that the literary part of literotica will come through in the stories, but am constantly disappointed. Keep writing; you have talent.
The story was written quite well. I would have given ot 5 stars if not for the regular grammatical mistakes. They were just enough to distract from a truly enjoyable read.
Brilliant simply Brilliant!!!! I never knew Erotic Stories could be so funny!! I was hurting in my sides rom laughing so hard If I didn't have a hard on did have pissed myself rom Laughing!!!
ENCORE! ENCORE! ENCORE!
I love your work. As always, the reader was able to perfectly picture the 2 characters and the scene (always a good thing to visualize). The build up to the sex was amazing and the details kept me hard throughout the entire story! Please keep writing; he long breaks in between ur releases have been killing your fans!