All Comments on 'Bright Lily and the Monster'

Really liked your story. Hope to see more in the future. Keep up the great writing. Thanks for writing and enjoyable, different story.

That was an excellent story!

No more needs saying.

It's a shame it seems to be a one-off, though.

Good. Damn good. Sci-Fi magazine good. Submittable good. There's talent here.

I must admit that I kind of figured that Bright Lily's life would be spared because of the "tear her flesh and bathe in her blood" part as that sounded a lot like the taking of a female's virginity. But, all in all, a very, VERY good story and I agree that you do have some measure of telant in your writing. Have you ever thought of writing something longer (like a book) and trying to have it published? If not, you should.

The concept of this story is wonderful! I wish it were longer. I do have a problem with a lot of your descriptions. The wording misses the mark slightly making some of your scenes feel a bit awkward. I see the feeling you are trying to convey but just polish up on your wording a bit.

A very clever turn of phrase, "tear your flesh and bathe in your blood," and a lovely little story besides.

Ha! Gotta love a smart chick!!! What a way to turn a dark deadly destiny into something sexy and fulfilling, and LIVE to enjoy it! Ha Ha Ha! Take that you worthless emperor!

Thank you!!! You wrote a hot story w/o all the crude words so popular now. Please write more!!!

Awesome story on Lily and the Monster. Will there be a sequel to it?

Also what about a story based off James Cameron's Avatar? Say a na'vi/ human lesbian story? Here is a reference pic to help that someone posted http://img689.imageshack.us/img689/4287/uhuraneytiri.jpg

Na'vi have a stronger sex drive than a humans. ;) Also what about some na'vi foot fetish too?

Your story is a bed time tale of building tension, eroticism and a delightfully humorous twist to the solution of the dilemma. Have you thought of doing an audio version?

Very enjoyable! I love these kinds of stories!

Nice make of fairy tale and eroticism. Funny and creative !

I saw where this was going from the beginning . You made it a delightful fairy tale very nicely written . Kudos

One of the best stories I've read in a long time.

I hope you continue writing, you've got a future in this ;)

A superb love story! Wish there were more like this.

Great story with such a cute couple. Bravo!

This story is awesome. The emporor was a bit of a douchebag. He got peed on? So what! I get pissed on by my baby cousin 24/7!! DEAL WITH IT!!!!!

Wow, thanks so much for this story!

It's beautifully written, the language is classy and matches the setting, it's really hot but also romantic. Just perfect!

Please write more! :)

Love!!!!!

I only see five stars. Isn't there some way to rate this a ten?

Completely predictable; the joy is in the execution. Nicely done.

Great story! Loved the sex, very erotic.

So sad to see you have no other stories to read.

If there is somewhere else you have additional stories...could you please share.

I'd be happy to pay for them!

Such a feel-good story and so wonderfully written!

Thank you!

This is quite possibly THE BEST story I've ever read on this site. Your writing is incredible---my eyes were stuck on the story until the very end, and then they wanted more. Thanks for the wonderful read!

I was just scrolling down, I didn't mean to rate that wonderful, clever story two stars!! I tried to fix it but it didn't work! Forgive meeee! ;~;

A truly exquisite fairy tale. Bravo!

Wow she really is smart

Wonderful! Although I'd guessed as much, seeing as she was both brilliant and a virgin and the Emperor taking offence at an infant and holding a grudge her whole life is obviously an idiot. lol