All Comments on 'Bringing Back a Son's Smile'

Good, but far too hurried. This story was more of a 'fuck fable' than a work of erotica. No seduction; no perceived reluctance; no guilt. This story was as sterile as an operating table.

The idea was good but the execution needs a lot more work. Keep trying.

And some sort of real seduction.

This was just too easy, nowhere near erotic, just like the usual porn stuff that do not care about story.

Think a little more next time you write something.

Don't be put off, just give the next one a little more time to get it right.

You might also repost this in future, when you have changed it for the better.

ES

Good premise, just too fast out of the starting blocks...and poof...the race was over...

More time, and thought into next story...and am sure you will do fine :)

Dont bother trying again. You blatantly dont have the talent or expertise to be a porn author so stick to reading it instead.

While this story could use some work I wouldn't totally discredit it as a piece of trash. With that being said I find it a common trend that the naysayers who negatively critique everyone else on here don't have the balls to post under a user name but instead post as anonymous. At least this author is trying to be a writer. Can you say as much? If you are going to criticize someone poorly grow a fucking sack and post something yourself otherwise shut the fuck up.

If you are so damn good,,,,,

Why don't you show us just how well you can write?.

If you are going to leave a comment like that, at least have the balls to sign your name!.

ED

We need more such stories from this talented author. My only (slight) objection is that when the boy is fucking the shit out of his mother's mommy-hole he should not be calling her by her first name--that's disrespectful of his mother. Instead, he ought to call her mom and even mommy, just as she should call him her darling baby boy. That fits the warm and intense intimacy of a boy pounding his stiff young prick up his mother's cunt and blowing his young balls up the same cunt he came out of.

This was a great premise for a story. I feel there should have been a little more of an internal struggle for Mom before she decided to make her son feel better about his life. Spell check would have caught the grammatical mistakes. Overall it was good but a bit rushed. Keep writing.

Good beginning. I'd take this one down the road 3 or 4 more chapters. Get dirtier. Mom's got to have a sister or two, then there might be a cousin. He's not a child. Make a man out of him.

XYZ

As one who has no problem with mutually consensual incest in real life, this is how imagine such a life style would be. As an avid reader of incestuous love stories, I like indepth character development. I like logical plot development. I like subplots that merge seamlessly into the main plot. Finally, I like authors who know how to use the English language and limit gutter slang to those instances in the story where said use is appropriate. In such a short story, the author has done the best he/she could. Would enjoy seeing the author develop this story. u