All Comments on 'Brother Deals with Sister'

The fulcrum of power was magnificent. At first the brother had all the power, or at least the position. BUt as the story went on you find his comment of her being in charge was more and more true. Beautiful 5

Started out great but by mid story it was just boring and repetitive... You need to work on describing things... You constantly say stuff like she pulled my ... And hers... Sat on... Boring... I want descriptions... Also she goes from swimming in the pool to walking into the house fully clothed...? Comom man... Your taking a hot scenario and turning it into crap... Have her come in in the wet bikini... Describe the seduction... And her... You start with an idea comparable to filet mignonette but offer piss and shit...

I liked it but I do agree with anamous ... Your idea to pay for sex with chores was awesome but your delivery is basically like throwing a hot dog down a dark hallway... You go way to fast there is no seduction to this story past the initial idea of the story

loved the progression!

It was nice, but the term "arse" got repetitive real quick.

Personally I thought this was very high quality writing!!! Pace was great, I don't understand why people are complaining? You can't please everybody but you certainly did me!! Thanks for sharing and you get a five from me as well!!!

This is a brilliant story that is different from your other tales by just the speed and progression. Loved it as I did with you initial offering. Hope to get more from your side very very very soon.

This story was VERY sexy.

Please keep this story going, this is one lucky girl, not one word about getting knocked up. A good read. .......................LAROC

This story is tough to critique, even to comment about. It's all over the map.

Essentially, the best comment I can make is that brother and sister do get around to a full-on, sensual, with emotions and feelings dick to pussy fucking with the ultimate money-shot in her womb tomb love chamber! The story theme, the deals, are difficult to comprehend and understand, in particular coming one immediately after another--fast and furious! Details were at a minimum, lacking and sketchy.

The pursuit of the brother for his twin sister was great as he was not to be denied. His sister finally relinquished her defenses and finally become the aggressor for the culmination of their ultimate incestual sex act.

There was an excessive amount of attention devoted to her ass--not as to the beauty of it or the niceness of it or the feel of it or that she had an ass that added to their overall sex pleasure--BUT (no put intended) the incessant fingering of her shit-hole EVERY fucking moment and always mentioning that it was going to happen. The author undoubtedly has an affliction of shit-fucking and ass-fingering phobia; the author's head may not be in her ass but the author's mind is stuck there!

loved the story. pace was good dont listen to anyone that slates story. one of best on here

Add to this please

I love this story, how everything is introduced gradually. Makes it all the better, keep up the awesome writing.

great read don't like how you ended so suddenly though

Very good story, siblings do make all kinds of deals with each other.

I'm really torn about this story ? Great Sin-cept and the escalating heat of negotiations was very sexy. But I didn't feel the humor or tenderness in dialogue. His twin sister was more like a hot co-worker in terms of how they related to each other. Maybe I'm being too picky .

This had hall of fame potential but while pretty hot and very decently written, definitely didn't fulfill that potential. Still I compliment how the author handled the initial reluctance morphing to grudging acceptance and finally enthusiastic participation process of the fair sister

I really like the story... So i want this story to continue... Please continue ...

Dont listen to these who criticize, let them have their opinion... You do your...

A brother that has to bribe his sister so he can get some, in any Dictionary his face would right by the word LOSER, at least their friends would have a side splitting laugh at his expense on that.

Loved it you should have continued it

I loved it so much. I think you should have made it longer so they were hardcore fucking it, but it was still really good. The story made me horny.

That was incredibly original and arousing.

Waaaow!Very very exciting story.More exciting when the sister starts to be horny with her brother and was the first one to look for a good fucking with him.I have not yet been able to fuck my sister though we have frenchkissed two months ago and Im pretty sure that by next week she will let me put my dick into her wet pussy.Last week,I entered into her room to ask her something and noted that she was sleeping on her belly and her short night gown had raised up to the beginning her beautiful ass.Her legs were slightly opened and I could see that her tiny pink thong had entered into her shaved pussy passage thus showing the two big lips of her shaved pussy.I immediately took a photo of this wonderful sight on my mobile and went immediately into my room to give my cock a very good relief!!!!.Every day I jack my cock till I cum.I shall show her the photo after I shall have been able to fuck her..

A well written and thought out story. Great build up. I like that you didn't go straight to sex. That is so boring and predictable. Well done. Thanks for the effort.

Well done. Great characters & great build up. Originally done because I never expected the arse play to start first & leading to the arse licking which led much much later to the love making because most stories goes to the fucking so the build up & the wheeling & dealing were really interesting & different. Likeable & memorable couples & twins. Would've love to hear more of them. Great job!

That is fucking sexy! Makes me so horny. I want to eat someone right now! Keep it going! (.) (.)

You could eat me and I would suck your dick and hump you so hard and fuck you so hard 8=====D I want to you to suck my pussy👅

Damn, what a hot situation they have. His sister has really enjoyed negotiating but now wants him balls deep all the time. She has her own guy to bang her senseless any time of the day and night. I sure hope his sister wants more and helps him along. Some added personal details would be great. Hopefully, she will want him to bang her silly and beg for his cum and helps him make more in between sessions. Thanks.

This was the most sensual erotic story I've ever read. Nicely written... Wow!

You did really great job of writing this and it was super detailed

I came twice

My pussy is buzzing after reading that. Got me so juicy.

You have 'broke' her in. Now it's time to get her PG. She's his cum slut now. Make her pay! She is his to do with, parents or not.

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another gay story

Interesting premise.

But each sex act is too matter-of-fact. Too fast.

Needs foreplay. Long, detailed foreplay. Needs dialog between them about what he'd like to do to her. What he'd like to have her do to him. Whether he's thought about her while he masturbates. What kind of porn he likes. Maybe they watch together to see what excites him, and what excites her,

Three stars.

Fun. Unique concept. No idea what it is you Brits see in. asses that gets you so excited.

Sure, it is an ego thing for guys, but after a couple times, That was plenty. Unless it was a request, never refuse a lady's request, I was all about fucking that wet, hot pussy.