All Comments on 'Bus Ride'

You would probably be better off just not having your characters talk. They have some of the fucking stupidest conversations I've ever read.

I thought the conversation was perfect for this tongue in cheek style of story.

Loved the clever ending - I don't know how you keep coming up with them.

Always look forward to your stories, as I know I will be entertained.

As opposed to an anonymous critciser about fictional characters' conversations.

That's fuckin stupid...

I loved the elements of this story and how they all came together. Brendan's plan to make Cherri pay for her bus ride with sex, the women who seem to take enjoyment at Cherri's predicament because they see her as a freeloader, the way Cherri quickly accepts that she's going to sit naked and impaled on a stranger's erection for the half hour bus ride. Very hot.

got what she deserved

A deal is a deal :) great story