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NUTCAKES SHOULD HAVE STAYED IN LALA LAND. TK U MLJ LV NV

What an evil woman. She started as just selfish but became evil at the end. Makes me think of a movie but I can't remember the name. This was much darker than most of your stories and I really don't know how to score. But I will do that after another read. Regardless I appreciate all your work. Something I cannot do so thanks. Jim

The stories are lacking a punch - The plot is decent but the handling is missing stuff that used to make SS06 stories a good read.

[:)

and delves in relationship after a break-up. TK U MLJ LV NV

Seriously! The five chapters flew by in terms of flow. No surprises per se but that doesnt matter if your hero has a Mustang with masterful schtick shifting. As for the story continuity ?

Ahhh no one cares about that. Check your guns & sense of cynicism at the door - the Stang man will see you thru till Friday sun rises in the East.

These are turbo nitrous injected fables for the new millennium . If you want nuance or evenhandedness hie yourself hither to the library & check out some Malcom Gladwell or David Foster Wallace.

I have the same problems now as I did when I started this story but Stang gave me a sabbatical from them for this little while . Thanks.

Maybe a little formula, but told in an interesting and unique way. I love stories that live happily ever after while getting rich in the process. You are really hitting your stride and becoming one of the best writers on this site.

It good to see you at the top of your game.

Dana morphs into Freddy (although the nightmare is not on Elm Street), and we have big jugs, hot Mustangs, and a much younger woman. What's not to like?

I don't think I have much to say other than that it was an entertaining tale. And Dana sure took a turn for the worse, with all her evil scheming.

The first few paragraphs (Dana's side) seemed strangely devoid of emotion though. It read like a list of things she had done, a small synopsis. But maybe that was because it was Dana telling her side, very matter-of-fact.

(Strangely, a lot of ex-wives seem to end up in psychiatric wards in LW stories...)

A supercharged ponycar with NOx injection, now who would've thunk that. Damn!

And don't forget to take a bread from time to time.

What can I say? Outstanding! You did it again mustang man.

Fluff.

That's what this story seemed to be filled with. It was fun to read, and I know it will generate a lot of accolades because its a cheating wife story with a "happy" ending.

But like msot Stang stories it just doesn't delve that deeply into any character. We are told that Dana thought herself as some semi-brilliant would-be historian, but aren't given any background into why she thought that, or what led her to believe in the professor.

We do get a bit of detail on Alex and her life, but again its mostly a summary of her first marriage and dating afterwards. It's told to us, but not shown. This story doesn't use its many thousand words to draw pictures and allow the reader to see everything. Really except for Dan, Dana and Alex there are no characters who are more than names and perhaps a very brief physical description.

I like Stang's stories when I want to read a story of a man who survives having a cheating wife. He's got talent. It would be nice to see him slow down a bit and put a bit more into his characters and plots. His last few stories have been rather formulaic, and I believe his talent is great enough to allow him to break out of the mold and write mroe unique stories.

a great story. Thanks!!

No more to be said

Amanda

Not the story. That was good. I hate to get personal here but I have to

I even see a lot of myself in the character Alex I should tho shouldn't I stang

somehow u even got the ages right real life could be like this story if u had the guts to be like these characters. The part that really hurts is that u wrote the line about how the age difference was never a factor but in real life it really is isn't it

As an avid reader and fan your stories... It would have been nice if you delved into the personality and emotional aspect a bit more....

enjoy the day stang and take care....

Full interesting moments and fascinating images.

Now if you moved ahead 30 years you will find the age difference weighing heavily. I have been married for 46 years and what was a meaningless age difference now weighs heavily because Alzheimer has reared its headand there are a lot of other potential problems for the age difference and in the tale, late fathering. You really can not play baseball with your boys at 70!

concerning your stories Stang. Either readers think your work is just fluff or they chastise you for not writing the Great American Novel.

Maybe I'm the one that's misguided but I read your stories to be entertained. Some I like better than others but your work is always entertaining; at least to me.

If readers want a great novel then let them go purchase one. But they'd probably bitch about it to. If readers think your work is just fluff, then don't read it folks.

I think you're one of the better writers on the sight. Right up there with some of my favorites like, Harddaysknight and Renquist.

So I'll continue to look for your weekly stories and enjoy reading them. Thanks for your hard work and please keep em coming.

Woodmanone

Your worst story to date. One star sorry.

A story with a twist or new angle. Thanks for the story and the entertainment. Mike from Texas

Stang I look forward to the stories you publish on this site and SOL. I agree with mike and woodmanone. If folks want the great American novel maybe they should write it and offer it up for criticism. 5 stars and worth it!

Da Swede

StangStrar06's stories have a special humorous style. I like it. 5 stars.

Yesterday he published a checklist to which authors on Literotica should pay attention, if not follow slavishly

The author of this piece disregard just about every one of the nine "rules" - and earned his one star

Can't complain about the waste of time - should have expected this quality of "writing" on LW

Great story and perfect ending. How can I say more?

Thank the Gods for Stangstar. There is enough wimp,cuck and slut bullshit on this site to sink the Titanic. Refreshing...

I started out reading and got to some points thinking "Oh come on" but then I realized this was a bit like a James Bond movie, you need to cut it a bit of slack. Then I had a lot of fun with it.

The ending was really vicious however. It's not nice to mock crazy people.

You do good work!!!!! No more need be said.

SS06 does it again! Outstanding story. Thanks MAN .

Women can be like this. You haven't lived until you have to bail the wife out for punching another woman in the mouth. The same wife that has lectured me on how to be a good boy. Good stuff. The wife in this story may have been riding the crazy train for a while. The last stop seems fitting.

If they were watching the ex they would have known about the trap at the resturant. Because of this being your worst yet, I had to rate it a four. They don't have a 4.75!.

Do you kick out such entertaining stories every week!

You are a good basic story teller. My only concern is often it is the same basic story.... Saint man. On the heavy side wife often with a trouble past. For some reason she cheats. He comes down hard. He hooks up with a perfect new woman. Wife goes nuts, evil or both. Husband and new wife win out in the end - yea. Old wife is in jail, psych ward or otherwise some how ruined. Which is OK but you can do more. I fear you are writing out a bad experience from your life. If so, keep it up. Anyway, thanks for the stories!!!

So your hero is a saint who, after 6 years, can't forgive or forget his EX-WIFE cheating on him. Boo fucking hoo! The bad lady scarred him for life...well grow the fuck up Mr. Lady-boy! Life sucks, then you die, deal with it.

Beyond that, none of the characters were remotely human. The big titted cheerleader with a pure heart. The conniving professors who fucked a fellow professor and ruined her marriage, the saint who KNOWS when someone is cheating on him and when their not. I could go on; but truthfully, I'm hoping to read some better stories, so I'll end with the ubiquitous: Don't quit your day job Stang because you STANGk this place up.

Delicious characters...thank you StangStar.

A great story and a super storyline. I think the character of the ex-wife was one of those characters that you love to hate.

Well done, and the story has a good ending. That makes the read even better.

Thanks for the story.

I am constantly amazed at the lines you come up with, such as the following one.

"Save it," said Dan, in the coldest voice I'd ever heard. His voice was so cold I swear that each time he opened his mouth a little light came on inside and I was looking for the Frigidaire sign."

I about fell off my chair, and it has arms on it. Note to self, add seat belts to chair for next story by Stang.

I have to laugh at the one post from anon, who decries the fact that the characters do not exist in real life. Let me tell you anon, yes they do.

Somewhere in the world, likely even in the good ole USA these characters are living, breathing, and fucking over other people right now. Only the names have been changed to hide from the innocent.

I was so looking forward to reading about Alex getting gangbanged by 13 guys and appearing to love it.

Then Dan, seeing the video got turned on seeing Alex getting fucked in her mouth, pussy and ass (virgin til the gangbang) and arranging for her to continue to get fucked by other men.

And Dan is really believable -

Unfortunately so is Dana - seen too many like her and the experience she had, while unfair, is also too real to ignore. This world is filled with people too stupid to see what is in front of them and way too many who will take advantage of a foolish dreamer who has stars in their eyes - sexual slavery is real and it starts with the exact same type of sales pitch.

Finding an unprincipled academic - color me surprised - oh wait never mind I believe it -

I too got a real laugh out of the refrigerator light going on roflmao -

Stang - you have been really using the multiple perspective conversations well - theses most recent stories flowed perfectly with it -

Thank as always for sharing - but where else do you posy ???

I read one of your stories and love it, thinking you've topped yourself over anything previous. Then I read another and find that I am wrong. Stang, you are indeed the man!

I agree with woodmanone, especially where he tries to crawl up the ass of "those great authors we all revere on LW", sheeesh.

nothing else comes close! crazy ass bitch deserves every crazed second. you write a mean story, great job.

It was interesting, well written, held considerable promise...until Page 5. Then it became a fairy tale. I'm sorry I wasted all that time reading it.

props to milk

Revenge is one thing but torture is cruel.

Someday even you get the hang of believable vilains. God, I hope your reality isn't like this, never to know who of your loved ones is going to snap and kill everybody. Coming to think of it, my Sister had an evil gleam on her during last thanksgiving.

How you keep to this schedule is beyond me, but I'm glad you do.

Interesting stuff with this. Unlike a few other readers, I thought you did try to flesh out the female characters, giving Alex a backstory. And Dana did not go all evil; she had a revelation when she realized what she had done and that it could not be undone. So crazy and mean, but also a bit of a sense of fun. Looking forward to this Thursday.

I have been busy, plus tired just read the story a new style for you. Hey I liked it, it was well written. You rushed to tie up the ending, but hey can't please everyone all the time. With a story a week going on you are more than ok with me. Keep on writing. To ALL OF THE NAY SAYERS, if you think you can do better and do it week after week, PUT IN ON LIT AND SHOW YOUR SKILLS PROVING IF YOU CAN THAT SS06 IS SLIPPING! If he did the same template each week without change folks would be crying things like no imagination and the like. Waiting for tomorrow already SS06 As always your fan BUICK GS

Thanks for the story! Looking forward to next week!

Get a room!

Good stories, though.

The changing perspective, while distracting at times, gave depth to the story. I have seen this done on longer novels (such as Tom Clancy) but rarely so successfully in short stories. Great job, Stang. BTW, keep using the mustangs. It's like the signature, "Bond, James Bond." that worked so well for Ian Fleming.

i thought we were going to lose alex there - for a moment.

stays deceptively inane, TK U MLJ LV NV

He is so far ahead of any other writer on this site that there is simply no available reference. Humorous and sometimes profound, eg. " That inner glow transcends mere concepts of physical beauty..... " .

I know it have been said before but it is difficult to include this in a sentence so it does not sound pompous. This is where the skill of a superb author comes forth.

What an excellent entertainment. Thank you Stang.

I have read a lot of your work, and as is hidden in your name, Mustangs play some role.

There are many good writers on this site each and some of them are very good. From some of their work, they might be professionals.

Before I read this piece I put you in one of those catagories that were listed in my mnd as a good read, but not quite making the grade in my mind.

I now must appoligize. I put this story on equal par with the very best of this site.

NOW -- the story, not a thought piece, not historical, a very very excellent read

MY rating is 5 star plus

Who am I to make this judgement? Nobody, except that I read one hell of a lot of books.

ONE DAMN GOOD READ

Butch

i love this sotry.

female for a villan. you need to do more of these rather than the dummies we end up feeling sorry for. you did great here with her. and the one in pta was not bad, but this one was great.

This is the second story I read from you. It's another great read.

A long and winding path to the summation of this story. Well written and consistent with stories written by SS06.

I enjoyed it and look forward to many more enjoyable reads.

Thanks.

Read this again - enjoyable as the first time.

Thx

gets better everytime i read it. THANK YOU

Excellent tale! I only wish it had been longer, starting from the beginning of his first marriage. Perfect, nonetheless.

So they're sitting having a conversation where he says she's 23, then less than a few chapters later she's 24? Where's Mikothebabys editing magic there? 1*

that I could download your tales in epub format for my Kindle! Any chance of that?

these are dan's tits not ur tits lol

You've concocted a great story. You have the rare talent of an active imagination and the ability to put it into words. Good job!

5 stars*********, oops a star typo.

great reed, "nother typo"

Truly unfortunate that many feel obligated to nit pick a good story!

Great that you noticed the a small errors. Sucks that you need to point it out.

read, enjoy and congratulate these author on a job well done

Liked the whole premiss of the story and how you ended it.

Okay. I can understand Dana thinking she "outgrew" Dan, I can even understand her affair with the Professor thinking he would help advance her career.

But his "passing her around to his colleagues"? Has she never heard the word "No"?

in the story as well as in the comments. I guess that is a sign that the author has stirred with a sharp stick.

My only thought at the conclusion of the series is fear for the long term relationship due to the total lack of personal drive, initiative, and individuality in Dan. He reacts, responds, and does whatever Alex tells him to do. If Alex ever gets bored and wants someone who has an original thought he will be history. again.

seems that ex wife Dana never learns from her mistakes in other words what a stupid bitch that decided to let anything fuck her that moved male or female.

Alex loved Dan and was going to do what it took to keep him. I have to say that she was to good hearted and trusting to Dana. Dan knew she was up to something but after Danas little one on one to Alex and Dan she let her guard down and it just about cost her but her knight in shining armour (Dan) came to her rescue. a very good love story it is in my favorite stories 5 stars plus. Tell me that you have a follow up story on Alex and Dan after they get married sell the company and get RFR,

Ron

maybe the Prof-Pimp was correct in his assessment, TK U MLJ LV NV

That is true love. No second thoughts just do what it takes to perserve there love.

Ron

it would be more appropriate to suggest "they" get a garage than a room.

and, as one who has been to the Cobra factory, and had the privilege of meeting Carol Shelby, I too can appreciate a good Stang when it rumbles by.

ALEX WILL NEVER GET TIRED OF DAN AND THE WAY HE GOES ALONG WITH THINGS AND AS OF HER DUMPING MAYBE IN 50 OR 60 YEARS. IT IS CALLED TRUE LOVE BETWEEN TO PEOPLE THAT ARE COMITTED TO EACH OTHER SO LOOK AT THE TITLE YOU KNOW WHAT YOU WROTE YOU ARE WRONG.

RON

...of greed morphing into obsession. No love for Dan there.

Highly entertaining story even on a second read through.

A real roller-coaster of a story! StangStar06 wrote a great tale about two decent people finding each other after being dumped on by two people from the OPPOSITE end of decent. Kudos! 5*****

I read this story before but never made a comment. I just can't figure out Dana. For a supposedly intelligent professor, how could she be so stupid to let her mentor pass her around like a common whore? I understand her having an affair to get ahead when she thought she was so much better than her husband, but being whored out to others? Was she really just a slut that liked some strange where ever she could get it.

I really enjoyed Alex and Dan. That was real True Love written so beautifully. I always enjoy it when the second woman is a little spitfire and Alex was all that. Thanks again for another wonderful story. Keep them coming.

Obviously, she HAD to do it... you do things for people you love who love you and clearly she loved him and he loved her... otherwise she was a stupid whore who threw away the person who DID love her for someone who couldn't care less about her and rather than doing loving things for him she'd have just been slutting herself out to a piece of crap...

And gosh, that wouldn't say much about her, would it...? =)

Enjoyed this one though...

Glad I hung in there because I really enjoyed it. Two things: 1. Dana in Calif. written as though she didn't realize, until a few months later, she had been fucking her prof's colleagues. 2. The scene in the female prof's office. Three women and SS used "she" so often I could not always tell who was speaking or being spoken to.

A very good story it seems Dana really messed up a good life and marriage and blambs everyone but herselfn than she went off the deep end,

Dan and Alex have a good life started.

I have to ask if there will be a sequel about Dan andAlex

Ron. Texas. cowboyridecc@ yahoo.dim

xtchr - "I understand her having an affair to get ahead when she thought she was so much better than her husband"

I feel so sorry for your wife or partner.

Having an affair is never acceptable, for any reason. The people who understand affairs are the ones who have usually already had one or are planning one. Do your partner a favor and divorce them or leave them if you aren't married.

Of course there's always some weaknesses in a story including grammar word usage sentence construction etcetera. The characters were clearly delineated and followed their roles as dictated by the author. As usual I hated to see this end and end it did. Obviously, I rated this five stars because it was solidly entertaining. Thank you for your effort!

Of course there's always some weaknesses in a story including grammar word usage sentence construction etcetera. The characters were clearly delineated and followed their roles as dictated by the author. As usual I hated to see this end and end it did. Obviously, I rated this five stars because it was solidly entertaining. Thank you for your effort!

are there really women like the ex? ,,, HELL YES

I guess that some people cam not help having weak moral fiber.Dan did everything to help Dana when she wanted to go back to school and she repayed him by sleeping with her professor that only thought of her as free pusssy.In the end Dan and Alex found each other and true love.

Ron. Texas. cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

I usually want LW stories to have reconciliation in order to have a happy ending, but that's not this kind of story. But, this story has a happy ending anyway. Thanks.

Reads like my ex wife. Where ever she is she and Dana or talking and trying to cool of because everything I have read about HELL it is really hot there.

Good story in my favorites.

Ron Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Maybe I was unclear in my previous comment. I can understand a lot of the reasons for affairs but they all boil down to weak, selfish and misguided people. Under NO circumstances do I ever condone an affair for any reason what-so-ever! I am a firm believer in the "One-And-Done" philosophy. Sorry for the misleading comment.

One of my favorites. Top notch story. A wife that thought her husband was not her equal in the smarts dept. There are to many out there like that as well as husbands.

Dan and Alex go together like bacon and eggs. Equal but not the same.

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

This is a wonderful story and you are a great writer. I love romance stories and in some of these I get that and more. when it is to raunchy I give it a 1 or do not vote at all.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

to REALLY Burn The Bitch! WAY YO GO!! More, please!

One of your best, Stang.

Even mentally ill people are responsible for their words and actions. Dana did some evil shit and didn't know when to quit when she was behind and could never catch up. Put a stake through it, slam the lid shut and call it a day.

Still one of the best. Had friends that split after the wife decided to go back to school. She got her degree, then decided that her husband who was a fairly successful plumber to the point that he paid all of her tuition and book fees, transportation while still keeping a roof over their heads, keeping all six of them, the two parents and four kids, fed and clothed decently, was no longer her intellectual equal. She then proceeded to divorce him. He basically said to the rabbinate which was handling the divorce that he would pay for the kids but not for her that if she is so intelligent that she can find work and pay her own way. They tried joint custody until it became a joke and he got full custody. Kids are still in therapy, don't understand why mommy left. She burned her bridges with them. Under Jewish law if a wife remarries someone other than her husband she can't divorce the second husband to go back to the first. Now she is so intelligent that she is barely making rent and food. And she swears that nothing happened prior to the divorce, as a separation is not a get out of jail free card. Neither can screw around until the divorce is final. Oops !!!

Fucking love it......one of the best story of this category..

I love this kind of story where husbands are real men..and not Wimpy ass which let wife fuck around...and some even get turn on by it...I fucking want to kill those wimply ass stories writers.

5*

Dana really messed up her life and marriage going back to school to better yourself is one thing but having your husband bust his butt to pay for it and all the time you are cheating on him with your sleez bag professor you get fired he gets fired you go elsewhere and he passes you around like the dumb whore you turned into and the light bulb comes on over your head that You Have Realty and Truly Fucked Up and Want Your Husband Back but just a little to late and to many men to late.

Alex and Dan were afraid to love at first but once Dan realized he wanted to be with Alex they just clicked. A good ending to a very good love story. I know I wrote more about Dana but it just ticked me off that people treat a person that loves them like that.

Alex would never think of doing something like that to Dan as he would never do that to her. In my favorites read it numerous times. Enough Said.

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo. com

One of your best. Thanks......