All Comments on 'Busted by His Mother-in-law'

Way too short.

- "Fuck me with everything. Fill my ass with your cum"

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Do NOT start a line of dialogue with a -. The quotation marks are all that's needed.

Fix your pronouns

Not a bad story but what mother-in-law? They weren't married. The ages don't really work. Doris, a woman in her 60's whose husband died 4 years ago when her 2 children were teenagers. So then she had these kids in her 40's? OK, it's possible. Now her daughter Ann is a freshman and the guy is a sophomore, both of them 18, 19 or 20. He wasn't seeing mother Dorias as Ann 30 years later but over 40 years later.

You should do a better job proof reading!!!!

Despite the proofreading errors, you should continue this story.

great story! Would love to read a part II