All Comments on 'But You're My Brother!'

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MORE, PLEASE!

I add my call for more to those who already have asked

What does the brother do? You've told us what the sister does but what does the brother do? You have left us hanging you have to continue this story!

way too many stupid goofs that should have been caught in proof reading or by a good editor IF you had used one. get a good editor and do a rewrite and NEVER EVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE AN EDITOR BEFORE POSTING.

DBRS

I was totally into the story, but I agree that having an editor would make the story much smoother to read. THANKS!

"I've been meaning to trim up," He confessed. "It's getting in the way and I gotta start work next WEAK."

GET AN EDITOR!

I love the aspect of life that has me keep repeating the line that sums up the single reason why I shouldn't do what otherwise seems perfect... "But you're my Brother!" is one of those lines!

The other comments are correct, get an editor, but first write three more stories! I like your style!

I thought most of the dialog and inner monolog was very realistic. Also, several of your metaphors were particularly beautiful. Sexy brother/sister romance overall- though I got the impression initially that she was the older, successful sibling and he was the younger, less-experienced one.

My friend is the best Bro/Sis author I've ever known and, if she has no patience with anonymous critics. I thought it was a hot little tale and would like to see you write many more.

Thank you for reading my story about Shana and Colin! It's been crazy fun to write!I promise more will be coming your way! Part two WILL be unleashed soon!

Does my excitement come across or WHAT!? You readers ROCK!!

Great job, look forward to many more, maybe it is because am from a different generation, my moore care free days all came in an era where condoms were rarely if ever used and have been in a long term relationship with both my wife and my sister for years, but I some how doubt I would have stopped just because I didn't have a rubber, fact is I know that I would have fucked her without one. But hey I know some of you guys now try to remind all to practice safer sex even in your stories, but I just had to say my bit cause in my era guys would never worry about what might happen until when it is to late to undo what was already done, we just gone with the moment, like the old saying, "damn the torpedos full steam ahead."

Keep up the good work.

To those who seem to think that your so Damned perfect about editing. Why don't you go fuck yourselves. This site is for Amateur writers and authors. Its about the fantasy of it all. Ya some of the dildo, author idiots are here and need critiqing in a major form. But karma_bonds did a very good job despite a major asshole here "oh and DBRS do I have your "undivided" attention??? Liver-lillied Bitch?! Are you so inept and or above the board of normal people. I think you are a closet monkey-spanking English Literature "INTERN" who corrects the professor's exam papers and wishes that he or she had and "imagination". I see your negative posts one here enough I wish you would be banned. So F O. Karma_Bonds keep up the good works and am looking forward to the next chapter in this hotly twisted affair

Great story and look forward to reading chapter 2. And I'd be happy to be a proof reader if you'd like. As for the anonymous critics, if they aren't brave enough to put their names to the post then they don't matter.

Great start! Your writing style is refreshing and it makes the characters come alive. Rock on!

You express the feelings many older brothers have;

namely, they'd love to have their cock sucked by their younger sister.

Total Crap

I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.

I totally agree with Cacowboy because if your ashamed to post that you read this or anyother story like this i think your a pussy!!!! i am not ashamed to say that for some reason these stories get me soaked and i love reading them.... I AM TOTALLY ADDICTED TO THEM THANK YOU!!!

U must b proud because the best love u can have is from ur own brother.There must be NO REGRETS.Noone has to know about ur relation.u just take care not to kiss or hug in public!and mostly,i would recommend u not to get pregnant.If u want to show ur love publicly,just leave the country and selltle in another one where noone will know that u are siblings!For me,love between a brother and a sister is the most beautiful and powerful feeling IF IT IS CONSENSUAL!

If you still need an editor I would be happy to edit for you.

I agree that sibling sex is the most wonderful consensual sex ever . This story epitomizes the desire that exists between many brothers and sisters and the indoctrinated prejudices that need to be faced and overcome for consummation of that inherent love and lust existing between them.

not thunk

way to rushed no background as to what their relationship was like before this why she was in hawaii and why he came there. this also needs a total rewrite by a GOOD EDITOR or GHOST WRITER. whatphone book can i find CACOWBOY and NAUGHTY_HOUSEKEEPER in NONE members are just as anonymous as we are just MORE BITCHY AND BIGOTED

Don't think it wrong Shana!This sort of love between you and ur brother is something pure and powerful,This is THE BEST OF LOVE!Plse continue this hot and beautiful story.

I am available for editing, if needed. My email address should be here.

More, more, more

DKP

I really like it.

Is anything like part one, I won't go to sleep for a while tonight (not that that is a bad thing *wink*)

If it is true love you are not fucking, you are making love. Brother and sister can only be a side issue. Make love, avoid pregnancy, live and love! If you choose to go on with your love-life, understand... No one gets to be parent and go on with life.

Well damn, that was a good story. I can't wait for part 2

Thanks to karma_bonds for writing this story. This is the style of brother/sister story that I love to find. There are a few like this; beautiful, tender and beautifully written with what I call genuine emotion and of course, very erotic. I particularly liked the use of the word "why" which Shana used twice when speaking with Colin. She was sooooo taken aback by the revelation that Colin was in love with her. That was so Perfect!!

I also appreciate the physical description of Shana. Many writers want to leave that to the imagination of the reader. There is so much other action going on in these stories for my imagination to work on.

I wish I could have found this story 7 years ago right after it was posted but I am fairly new to LIT but not to life. I guess I don't understand the rating system. I would have thought the rating for this story would have been much higher. But I gave it 5 stars because of the afore mentioned. -bern1965(pending).

God this turned me on so much. Reading this while my younger brother eats my pussy

Nice

AWESOME story .

What an idiot for the old BF!

Sex was.GRy.

Excellent sibling adventure

Can’t wait for the next episode!

you arent doing any thing wrong! if you only knew how lucky you both are to have each other.

Loved the story.

Continue please.