All Comments on 'Buttonnose Ch. 01'

A Mother sharing lifes greatest treasure with her son is the ultimate gratification and pleasure. Hopefully this story will help rid some Mothers inhibitions.

If you are going to write a story like this don't write it in the third person, write as it is happening.In other words not like this "I shut the lights off and got into bed under the sheets with you. As soon as I was in the bed, you rolled and snuggled close to me. As you moved close to me you hugged and pulled me closer to you," but like this- I shut the lights off and climbed into bed with her. As soon as I did she turned toward me. and pulled me close to her we snuggled down and held each other close as we did.---

You wrote how you felt or would have felt{?} First person, third person, who the fuck really cares. Your story was fucking HOT! Ignore the negative horse shit, and just keep writing.

Alright as a first attempt, but I don't think you had quiet made up your mind if you were telling this from a first or third person point of view, and unfortunately this showed. Third person tales work fine in voyeur type stories, but for a story involving these types of feelings and emotions, it is best sticking to first person - makes life easier for you the writer and more important, the reader.

This was my mother and I many tears ago, I am an old man now and my mother wife has passed on. We had many years together and two children. We were damned by thousands and supported by a few less judgemental souls We made it through. Thankyou

I got bored part way through the first page....