All Comments on 'By the Bay Ch. 01'

OH Lillian! There u've gone and done it again!! Im goin to be so hopelessly distracted till this story is completed.... That was TRUELY and COMPLETELY mesmerizing!

Laxmy.

But I was quite confused about the sisters being Indian, as the story is set in Singapore. I can't claim to know anything about Singaporean history but I was surprised and distracted by that. If there is reason for a lot of Indians to be there, it would be nice to include it in the story as not everyone knows. All the Singaporeans I know are of Chinese descent.

Well done, and your research for the time period really shows. Can't wait for more. :)

As a writer with a personal and professional interest in the history of the Malay peninsula I found this fascinating. And very well written.

I have only two quibbles regarding the accuracy of the historical setting. In the British Empire all measurements were Imperial, not metric, so the reference to kilos is incorrect. And secondly, in the British Empire, the floors of a building are described in the British and not the North American way. So the NA first floor is the UK ground floor.

But these are tiny quibbles and I only raise them because the author is so clearly a perfectionist that she ought to know!

A beautiful piece of writing.

Looks like a great story in the making.

Nice to see that you came back. Lovely start. I hope that the older sister gets a man since she has focused so much on her sister for most of her life. And I can't wait until the next chapter!!

DON'T IGNORE COLOURBLIND THAT STORY IS AWESOME

Intrigued by the story line....

Waiting for more of what might be a great story,

!!~~!!

do u speak an indian language called telugu by any chance? i do "amma" "akka" etc. are all telugu words

Yes, in fact i do speak bits of tamil, and i do believe that the Indian dialects have several words in common as they're derived from Sanskrit. I would ask you to research your own heritage/the heritage of my characters before dissing the research that i've slaved over for months. Thank you very much. Oh, and please leave a name the next time.

the words you used are indian (telugu words)..not from singapore..i know because i speak it...

so far, looking for more action to this story.

You have set the stage nicely and you have my attention. I am intellectually aware of the vulnerability of third world women, but you are bringing it home very well. I look forward to your development of the story. Lynn

You started the story with the mother of the 2 girls being ill and she just disappears...

The rest is very well written and keeps you alert!

The potential is unlimited.

Did I miss a 5 year gap after the love sick mother fell ill?