All Comments on 'Calendar Girl(s)'

So was April or August the "very last one" photographed? Major distraction from the story.

Tune up the grammar and punctuation. Reads more like an outline than a story. Add dialogue showing how they arrived at each month's idea. More enjoyable than not - looking for your next endeavor.

Thanks anonymous 1 and anonymous 2, maybe I should have done it six months at a time and fleshed out the individual months in more detail, oh well

Fox: My humble advice to you is to always just delete and ignore any criticism from any "negative anonymous" snipers. These cowards have never written their own stories and yet rip on those who do. For some sad reason they seem to live to rain on the parades of others.

That being said; I agree with the "positive anonymous" comment that some more dialogue would make the story fun and draw the reader in more. Since it was in the exhibitionist category, I would have loved to have someone walk in on them during the photos and let someone see them. Or maybe you could have two guy friend assistants who hold the lights and do the make up?

Great work. I will watch for more from you. :)

Thanks Poorwriter, you made my day

this would have been a great illustrated story

Very good idea not just for a story but for an actual present !

I would love for my wife to do this!

Great story, clever and sexy and exciting, I love it...