All Comments on 'California Dreams'

Good start hope you continue thecstory

I thoroughly enjoyed this...please continue this...it is very good.

Reasonably well written with no errors. However, it was rather disappointing how fast they fell into bed together. Little thought on how their relationship would be, and not much of a seduction.

Look at a map before you write a story (Big Sur is over 300 miles north of LA; gets a lot of fog in the summer mornings [Colleen couldn't be out enjoying the sunshine...] and the water is pretty frigid.........). Story got to the sex a little quick but was interesting - continue!

It is funny how everybody is so beautiful in these stories and that they are just 'hos" who have sex with anybody no matter who when they get into the details. How can a 19 year old be a expert unless she has been really promiscuous for along time.

What else? Cheers!

Started off yet another good story, but not finished it, just why ?

Oh, you have got to give us 4 or 5 more chapters. Colleen is going to UCLA and Cammy is coming out for the rest of the summer and you know she knows what Colleen and uncle have been doing. She wants in on it, and she's still a virgin. Colleen makes friends at school, she brings them to uncle's place, they want to fuck him, plus a couple of hot old girlfriend friends want to know why he hasn't been fucking them, and they find out a bunch of teenagers are keeping his balls empty. So, keep writing, watch your grammar and editing

You just started it. But, according to the date you wrote it, there probably won't be anymore chapters.