by 8letters
Really enjoyed your story. Well paced, nice characters, sweet sexual build up.
Very well written and developed. Enjoyable to read without is being too, ribald and unrealistic. Thanks.
I'm glad to see that you posted this one back up. One of my favorite incest/taboo stories.
Really enjoyed this story, both are fun characters with a bit of depth to them.
Loved it, the way you developed the story beautifully. Unfortunately, I could only reward you five stars it deserves a lot more.
Just one little thing: What happened with Ginny? Besides nothing, I mean. At one point it sounded like she was going to phone Jackson, to maybe get back together, then Mia got all jealous and pretended to be her, and then... Nothing. Nada. Zip, zilch, zero. So *did* Ginny get in touch with Jackson and he gently turned her down (or-not-so gently, depending), or did she find someone else, or what? That would be a thread to have nicely tied off.
I liked it. Nice work and character building and creating drama outside of relationships.
Yet another 5 star story. Love your work and I'm already excited for whatever you post next.
I'm not sure what you mean by 'two-track style' you use in your stories? Could you clarify that bit?
@Anonymous asking what I mean by "two-track style", I frequently write stories where there is a storyline about the brother and sister slowly falling in love and a complementary storyline that focuses on (typically) the brother's life outside of his relationship with his sister. Mia and Jackson are very compatible, but I felt there needed to be a separate storyline that pulls them together. Otherwise, the story is about two siblings deciding one day to fuck. That complementary storyline was Jackson working under an abusive boss. Originally, the story ended after Mia and Jackson made love for the first time. But my beta-readers wanted me to tie out the working-under-Janice storyline by Janice getting her comeuppance. So, I added the epilogue.
And thanks everyone for the encouraging comments. They are what motivates me to keep writing.
Enjoyed the story & the 2 track added interest. You left it at the right point as it can stand on its own or you can add to it later if YOU chose. Keep it up man
Really, really enjoyed that story. Like too see more, like they talk about having a baby, and they become a family...
Great read! Love the storyline & build up. If you get the chance a follow up would be awesome! Maybe that long weekend trip or adding to the family a few times.
Very good story, I enjoyed it immensely but you need to do another chapter about if he takes the job and more about their relationship and does she get pregnant
Excellent story of two adults coming to a point of filling each other's lives while appreciating each other, and finding more.
So very good
Five for you
I was looking forward to this one
First of all, this was a wonderful love story. Both characters were endearing and lovable.
But the epilogue? You do realize you spent more time dealing with office politics than their love story? It turned a love story into an existential tragedy.
Somewhere, early in my life, I realized that hell was being in the cubicle in some office, passing paper or data from one cubicle to another.
As we entered adulthood, I looked at all my friends. Those that had a passion pursued them either successfully or unsuccessfully. Those with no passion, no interest in anything specifically, entered “business”.
I had friends who were cooks, teachers, actors, musicians, medical professionals, electricians, carpenters, decorators, florists, writers, painters, lawyers, beauticians, programmers, etc.
Most only occasionally complained about their jobs. Those who went into “business” either complained profusely or refused to talk about their jobs.
Yes, I realize that many of the above mentioned professions are also a business. But they are not cogs in a wheel. Cubicle workers seem to sacrifice too much of their lives for something that means so little to their personal lives.
Some say the worst tragedy someone can be fall is poverty. I say, the worst tragedy is lack of real passion.
Hot story, did you have children? sounds like you both would be great to have them!
Wonderful to see anotherone of your great stories return to Literotica. Also nice to see new ones pop up. You were missed.
I rarely comment on stories I like.. I just read, sometimes I leave worthy stars..
Man this was incredibly well written.
This is special. I hope you continue it with part two keep going re-uploading these stories.
I thought it was good, 5 stars, and I'd like to see it continue. Nothing like a true love story.....
Excellent story. I love stories with a slow build up and a good sex scene without the ridiculously graphic descriptions.
I read the the original version twice. This one's great too! You made this revision a smooth read with just the right amount of very believeable emotions.
This is probably the best story I've ever read on this site. Very cute, very romantic and very, very sexy. I really hope we get to see these two again. Perhaps on that special 3-day weekend they talked about...?
Great story. I liked having the extended author notes too, that was a nice touch
I liked the story, I have a sister I would love to "know" better, but it will never happen,
(2/12/2024) Another great read. Very HOT in the end, and it was worth the wait. This goes on my list again. I have no critiques. Thanks for sharing.
I like. I would've loved for more of them having sex but I definitely wanted to see when that some day come
I THOUGHT IT WAS ONE OF THE BETTER "BRO DO SIS" STORIES I HAVE ENCOUNTERED IN YEARS. THANKS SO MUCH FOR REALLY GOOD STORY. CINCO ESTRELLAS!
Wonderful story! Full of heart as well as heat, and believable while still being a warm fantasy to allow us to escape our regular lives.
Who are these people ? Who talk like that. No tension at all between brother and sister.
Great story, really enjoyed it. I liked the way Mia played it...he gave her many chances to back out, but she had made up her mind. Great! You author very good stories.
Outstanding story. The buildup was just the right pace. I enjoyed the way you took your time constructing the events surrounding thier circumstance. The plot details seemed reasonably air tight. Having secondary and even tertiary characters and settings really added dimension to this story. Well done.