by TQM
Guilt seems to strong an emotion to ascribe to this woman. She managed to overcome her so-called guilt pretty easily. Why should we hate her? After all, she is "just trying to live her life" as a faithless whore.
It's obvious the whore has no real guilt. Hubby should find out and dump her ass without anything. Let all her family and friends know what a piece of shit whore she is.
She wasn't experiencing genuine remorse, she only went through pretend guilt to make herself feel better about betraying her husband. He should catch her in the affair and divorce her and then her lover should dump her ass as well and brag about nailing her to the entire office.
I wasted my time skimming through this juvenile piece of nothing.
just make a whore out of every women your mom,sisters and wives who give a fuck.that sentence sounds like what you write.
It started nowhere, and continued on its merry way to get nowhere as well.<BR>
Waste of reading time, basically.
this is just another cheating whore story. I hope her husband finds out and boot her ass out the door. Not worth reading.
this story is erotic and hot but there is NOT an ounce of guilt.
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Imagine if and when the husband finds out. I think he would try and kill her with his bare hands
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scratch one marriage
I kind of wish it started from the beginning of the affair, but nevertheless it was hot.
Hope to see more of your work soon.
Talent surfaces but doesnt know what to do with itself. Just a wandering of - I did - I won't again - I did again and plan to do it once or more but I feel so - oops maybe not and sure wish I could dress more like his slut until I go home to - whats his name?<P>
It said nothing of value and promised nothing of consequence - so it was - nothing - and was worse than nothing because of that.
I wake up, I feel terrible, I just fucked him again, I feel terrible, I just made out, I feel terrible, thats why 16 year olds shouldn't get married. High school story.
The story's name does not fit. This is just another cheating wife that can't or won't control herself. She's on the fast track to becoming a slut.
The author's prose is decent, and the story's pacing is good. There's no plot to speak of, the scene is just a vignette of two adulterers having sex. Psst: that happens on cable TV a lot. I activated my guilt detector and found none so no cookie for you.
Not a bad description of guilt. If she had real feelings for James, that would have upped the confussion.
This story has more questions than plot. The heroine keeps asking herself, "How could I have done it? I feel so guilty." so lets fuck again!" I'm still snickering. I promise you that if you put this story in the humor category you'll get a better response. Because it IS funny.
You've got to put more of a plot into this thing. After a very brief explanation of how they knew each other there was no real reason why they ended up in bed besides he was hot for her. A better build up was needed and a better conclusion. What happened to her after the sex? Did it affect her marriage? How did it affect the "stud fucker"? If you are going to write such a truncated story you should let us know that there is going to be a part two, if there is in fact going to be one.
I guess the conclusion to my long winded comment is don't rush the story out the door because you finished with the sexual encounter. Polish it and get in all the improtant details. It makes the story that much sexier.
yars this is excatl how I felt before, during and after the sex. keep this one going and write about the next night and then how she dealt with it when she got home. It's hard but do-able. I know.
I don't approve of cheating and her lack of strong response to her own straying keeps me from giving you a 100%. The description of her during the sexual activity was outstanding. As a man, understanding femal sexual response is always a challenge. Your descriptions were first rate. Well done. I look forward to reading more from you.
She's a slut and since in this case it involved business she is a whore. So be it. Get divorced and do what you want and dont place your husband at risk. Have some honor, some ethics, some morality.
At first it sounded to me like a contradiction in terms (Etiquette and -cheating), but then I chided myself for my naiveté. Every society regulates its social institutions, and why should cheating and cheaters be excluded? So finally someone comes and informs us, among other things about ‘the three kisses rule’ (couldn’t it be applied to any courtship? But what to me know). <P>
BTW, is it my imagination or more and more submissions are allowed to be shorter and shorter? It tends to correlate (although it’s not always the case) with embryonic ideas; semi developed plots and abrupt endings. This submission was of the latter variety; more of a beginning of a vignette than a story. It’s a shame because the writing shows promise. As others have noticed, you could find there some observations which rang really true (based on experience?), albeit with an emotional detachment I would normally associate with a manual for operating heavy machinery. <P>
I thought it could have been a better fit for a ‘How to’ - cheat without a flinch or ‘how to’ - overcome post coital cheating remorse (and still get the better part of it the morning after as a bonus). Then again, maybe humor was the best category. But, overall the haste to submit was the weakest link of this submission (whatever category one wishes to see it put under).
I'll be the last to defend cheaters, if they have no guilt it tells me they are even sicker then they think they are BUT that's besides my point. Just because a story is titled with a qualifier or an adjective it does not automatically mean the implied author provided us with the code to interpret the story. Two additional common relations between names or titles and stories' content are: 1. the title is meant to draw attention to the ISSUE OF; or the PROBLEMS of; or the difficulties of dealing or confronting guilt. 2. to convey ironic tension, between the quality described by the title and the content in the story.
IMO, this short vignette is in fact a mixture of the two types. Indeed it does not convey the 1:1 direct relations which many seem to assume are the only option, namely, if the title says: Carry's guilt- then it is supposed to be taken as a reding guide: look ONLY for feelings of guilt in the story. Anything else indicates a failure on the author's part. With all due respect, I believe that in fiction, authors enjoy (and assume that readers are aware of it) more artistic license in putting statements which are meant to be read NOT LITERALLY. For example, in the past I have noticed that the possibility of an ironic statement is frequently missed, even as it has been one of the most significant 'modes' in modern fiction. I feel I almost wrote more than this submission provided, but I feel that this common error (that of assuming only the literal read option from the voice of the narrator or the implied author) is important enough to dedicate the space and time for it. I hope that my effort at pointing out this common error will not be mistaken as disrespectful to any poster.
Thanks all for the comments.
Look guys: every story is a sketch. One of the themes that interests me (especially here) is how guilt motivates.
On the one hand guilt can stop you from acting. On the other hand, with sex, guilt can actually fuel desire. For some, an illicit affair is made all the more exciting by being illicit.
Also - some of you clearly need to grow up. Affairs don't just happen to bad people who plan them out. The vast majority of affairs happen without any intentional planning.
And most times, affairs do produce conflicting feelings - on the one hand fueling lust; on the other the disappointment in yourself that you've been unfaithful.
I think anyone who reads anything else into the story is reading too much. It wasn't meant to be complicated.
For what it is worth [after reading several of your stories], I agree with the author's perspective about just examining the emotions that surround some of these types of affairs. In this case, it was a simple & not complex story.
A guilt-ridden person does NOT almost immediately repeat the indiscretion over and over and over...
it's a fine metaphore: guilt ridden. Taste it reeeaaally slowly ...
And she is confronted by her husband because her lovers wife had him followed, than sent audio and pictures to her husband, she actually might suffer from real guilt and pain. This wasn't a slip, this broke hearts and ended two marriages. How is that for real guilt. She was also fired for fucking a vender, so she gets to start a whole new life, perhaps a little wiser, but who knows.
This have no plot, it is disconnected and childish. I would discourage this author of continuing this travesty of writing !
I am shure his comment would fit this story to a "T" !!
not to mention vows, trust and respect. TK U MLJ LV NV
Why does she submit an incomplete story? Doesn't this bitch know how to finish a story? Is it lack of imagination, or just laziness? Looks like another "fixer upper" for FD45.
Carrie should kill herself for cheating on her husband.
just the mental dance she does inside before she ...cheats again. And
she'll get caught, and have those unwanted conseuences.
It gets easier every time; eventually, she won't feel bad at all!
5 star work nice job. One thing... cheaters pay a price anyone would agree, make the sequel where the husband finds out or turns up and she loses everything, because her lover is not wanting a relationship only a notch on his belt.
make Chapter 2.. this time have the husband surprise her.. but finds her.. start at the beginning.. at the bar... to sneaking into her room, video taping. I agree with the comment... have him take her ring while she slept.. infact have the husband go through the new boyfriends things too.. taking his family pictures.. yes, make him a married man too.. taking his ring too .. then the morning she runs into him in the hotel restaurant would be classic... telling her to stay with her new boyfriend... perhaps tell the boyfriend.. he has his ring and photos would make nice story line...
I agree, there is something missing here, why cheat, what is missing from her marriage that she forgets her husband? Is it that simple? look at spouses that travel and are apart for a while, married yes, but thinking of each other? you be the judge. I believe there should be a next chapter.
Because she was a cheating slut...I don't understand the guilt....Cheating sluts don't have guilty feelings...
After listening to many marriage and relationship experts whom offer advice to callers and show participants, I wonder about this story. As a reader, I get the idea Carrie and her husband are in deep financial problems, in her own words, the husband was back in their apartment? Could it be this couple is dealing with their financial melt down? The husband although not mentioned by name or occupation, but only as at home in their apartment? Could the husband be in deep financial trouble too? Perhaps laid off? We have Carrie at a travelling seminar, so perhaps Carrie works long hours, travels when required and the husband is struggling to find work? What really breaks is more than the vows, its the financial expectations that also go along with a marriage. Sure we say we will love honor and cherish, for richer or for poorer, but really? Then we have James, the slick handsome sales vendor that has eyes not just for Carrie but any married woman? why? perhaps James too is married, with kids and a single woman would want a permanent relationship or at least want to continue the affair. While a married woman would stress and worry and struggle as Carrie is doing in the end of the story. Does anyone think Carrie would repeat after dinner? For me, my answer is no, I think the guilt would carry on through the day and become a distraction. Now, mind you this is my opinion, and lately many programs and write in advice columns have seen the same scenario in real life. Do I call Carrie a slut? NO, I call her human and a person that really needs a good counselor to talk too.
the next time will always be EZer. TK U MLJ LV NV
Far too many unresolved issues.......issues which the author has presented in a compelling fashion, issues which will have significant life impact, issues which deserve to be acted upon. but not by this author apparently.
does not know whether to **** or go blind 5 stars
...but since when has it become your habbit to stop inmiddst a story without completing it? 2* for the efford, but you lost at least 2-3* on your way. Sorry. Your usual standard is higher,
The only end for this story must be she dies because of a STD she got with the lover!!! 1*
and since they know and are aware it ends up making no difference. TK U MLJ LV NV
You raised the beginnings of a story but never carried it out. Too bad.
If she really cared about her husband, this was only the beginning of the guilt and FEAR that would eat her alive. She would have to face the decision as to whether to tell her husband, risk giving him an std, or risk having him find out some other way. She might even confess under the stress of it. Fortunately for her, she was not likely experiencing "guilt". The fact that she fucked him again cold sober is kind of proof of that. She is afraid of getting caught and that is about it. That means she doesn't care about her husband and marriage all that much. She was willing to get drunk in a public place, fuck someone she does business with - a guy who does not care about her and will likely tell others about fucking her. The odds of it coming out are high. So, in the end she really does not have much to lose and as such, the reader does not have much to care about either.
What guilt? Can the next story in this series be called "Carrie's suicide"? But of course by your definition by the end of the story she'd still be alive and well I suppose.
Sure hope her husband reads her guilt when she gets home and kicks the cunt to the curb!
Once a cheater,always a cheater!
C-U-N-T cunt,cunt,cunt!
I allways wonder why people use this sentence "Once a cheater,always a cheater! " to discribe someone who cheated and those people think the cheater will do it again,why is that ?
This sentence has much more to with reputation,in the eye of people someone who cheated will do it again wether she/he will or not,this reputation stays with them
Over the years i met cheaters,both male and females,very few cheated again because the consequences are hell,who in theyr right mind would want to go to hell twice ??
Soon to be serial cheater like one real life one exposed on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com. Lost her college instructor job in Helena Montana because of that info. Coerced student younger than her into affair, when it ended she said and did things to damage his reputation and marriage. She succeeded in costing him his job. Friend of his decided to get facts ouy
PHOTOS TOO. 50ishcollege instructor, grandmother, on 3rd marriage. PENETRATION PHOTO SHOW HER PURPLE ROSE TATTOO!!!
NO EVIDENCE THAT SHE FELT GUILTY AT ALL. AFTER THE MORNING AFTER FUCK SHE IS WISHING SHE HAD SOMETHING SEXY TO WEAR AS SHE NOW FEELS THAT WAY.
SHE WILL SPEND NIGHT WITH LOVER-CHEAT ON ALL SUBSEQUENT SEMINARS-BEGIN CHEATING AT HOME
SERIAL CHEATER
based on the story and only the story, I see a one time fling with remorse. Add a wife away on business, alcohol, and a fellow salesman that catches her eye, and of course has many or much more desirable attributes than that of her husband. mix together and you have an affair. Some call her a slut, wish she was dead or catch the case of an STD. What nobody calls her is HUMAN. Your marriage is your marriage, the vows you take are your own and nobody else's. Your vow is between you and your partner. If that vow means nothing, then society, friends and family will never make it right or all better. I am guessing some would love to see blood, would it make it better, would seeing a person so humiliated that their presence would be too embarrassing . Would the idea of a next chapter, the husband and his brothers show up as a surprise, their wives are coming the next day, the husband witnesses the dinner, drinks and dancing exchange, Carrie does not even notice her husband and his brothers there. The husband follows Carrie and her lover or just met night twist to her room, obtains a card key and waits. gets plenty of post sex stills of the sleeping couple, takes her wedding ring, deletes all her photos in her phone and numbers too, almost formats the phone in the process. Takes the lover boys wallet and phone discovers he is married, transfers family photos and addresses and numbers and deletes his phone too. Leaves. Carrie soon discovers after James departs her wedding rings are gone, tears apart the room in a frantic gesture, frantic yet futile. Carrie then has the idea that James quietly takes them hostage to guarantee another night with him. Angrily but snickering she leaves her room and heads to the restaurant for breakfast. Once there, Carrie meets up with James, and demands her wedding ring back, and if he returns it now, yes she would welcome is presence tonight again. James looks amazed and responds I do not have your wedding ring, and yes I will accept another night with you. Carrie not believing but in a lower voice gets demanding, thus pushes James, which responds, back did you delete all my files, pictures and phone numbers from my phone. The phone was fine last night now everything is gone. Carrie stops and looks at her phone, the background pic of her and her husband is gone, so is the screen saver and too her files numbers and pictures are also gone. Puzzled they look at one another, then from the corner of her eye, she sees her husband and his brothers walk into the restaurant. Stunned and pale, James does not understand and watches as Carrie steps up and heads to the three gentlemen. Nervously she sits down and says good morning. Her husband looking up from her menu, while his brothers without expressions look at her and beyond, returns yeah I am sure it is. Carrie sensing deep seated fear, asks do you have my wedding ring? Her husband replies yes, you lost them last night with that James fellow. Oh and don't worry his wife will hopefully understand too. He looks at the menu, and coldly asks Carrie, why don't you enjoy your breakfast with James, because he is the only man for now that wants your company. I will never want you. Carrie bows her head and returns to James's table where she quietly tells him whom the group of men are. In a panic, James gets up, cancels his breakfast and leaves money on the table and leaves. The rest the author can fill in. Now is that what sharks out there would like to see! A vengeful husband punishing both the wife and lover?
Men flirt with women for one reason and one reason only: in hopes of talking her into having sex. Women flirt with men for one reason and one reason only: to let other men know she is available for sex, whether she is married or not. Men have sex with married women for one and only one reason: to establish themselves as dominant male over another man. The woman's role is only secondary in importance, even if that.
Good story, well-written. Possibly needs extension, or a part 2 ??? Realistic about what gets them into bed ... lowering of inhibitions ... impulse of the moment .... The guilt could maybe be explored further? Once a benefit has been granted, it is hard to withdraw it. So although Carrie wanted to sneak off on waking, when James moved on her she didn't know how to say no. Would she be able to fend him off that evening? Might she give in because she was afraid others would notice his advances? Guilt vs lust with the option of a 'just this once' compromise.
An author who cant satisfy his wife... suffers from premature ejaculation...just like his sub standard incomplete stories
Wow you really kept those homosexual desires buried deep didnt ya twinkie!!
Im still sad to see you arent around. I love watching you kids struggle for elbow room in that closet.
Thank God you quit posting. Another so called "author" who writes a thought but can't really assemble a story with an ending. This is trash....pure ass wipe