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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Too hot to comment.....

....on anything but the grammar. You too often lose the story with unfortunate shifts of tense and person. Too many issues this time to ignore.

It all interfered with the story unfolding before us. PLEASE, put more effort into proofreading your episodes!

Why take away from your story by letting sloppiness intrude? You're better than this.

Oh. It's still a very, very hot and fun story.......just messy and more difficult to enjoy this episode.

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