by sethp
Bro! You did it again! This story is so hot, I almost had a stroke reading it! Thank you sir!
You have a great story line/world. It could lead our main characters to additional adventures and other characters kidnapped and brought to this world
please continue the tale/stories
I think this is a great story. You only had a few mishaps. All in all five stars. And please continue with these kind of stories.
I really injoyed this story hope you write a sequel or create an expanded universe from this.
Great story
I honestly respect fantasy world magical abduction stories that just say "fuck it, MAGIC AND SHIT" than some ham-fisted attempt at creating an alternate timeline modern slavery system with a billion flaws that never get addressed. At least this story is logically consistent and doesn't have any gaping plotholes. Only gaping holes.
Very interesting and erotic storyline but you need an editor. You make lots of basic grammatical errors that spoil it for other writers who are fussy about grammar. 4 stars.