by Jena121
A little too short for what should have been a complicated story...sometimes, more actually is better.
It's a good story, but it could use a little more information as what was going on. I did enjoy reading it though....Rich
It was very well done, a little longer would have been better, but it's still pretty good.
A well told tale. Not too short for this type of story whose appeal lies in it's good erotic descriptive passages and the unexpected twist at the end.
i really hate when writer only give us the middle of the story omitting the begining and end. this could have been a good story if it had been finished and if there was a proper begining. as to one comment about the so called surprise endding what surprise it's in the incest area we know it has to be a relative. please delete this story then rewrite it and include the missing begining and end then and only then will it be worth reading.
DBRS
Having read a few of these now, this is about the most head-shaking submission. Have a bit of regard for your unfortunate readers please.
You're just using a new pair of names and muddling the setting a bit then giving us the same drivel time and again. What's next Bobby & June then Stan & Muriel etc etc?
Spare us please.
A potentially good storyline but too condensed leaving too much detail out of the middle of the story. 4/5