All Comments on 'Chastity'

Dude.....what?

Well that was certainly different. Sort of an erotic groundhog day. I would have liked to have seen some mom daughter action, either from his mom and sister or the Kobayashis, or both. Speaking of Kobayashi, nice usual suspects reference also. You should continue this. I give it a 4.8, whicb rounds to a 5.

Sparks, the main character, dug up a strange crystal in his backyard when he was a kid. Unlike groundhog day he keeps reliving key parts of his life over and over again and is unaware on a conscious level. Like i said, an experimental story. Keep the suggestions coming in. If someone is unclear i will try a second draft if you feel it is worth it.

....what the fuck did I just read? The only part I get is the emotional dilemma he had at the end for sharing her with others, guess it kinda fits as punishment.

Huh??????

Not so much confusing but odd.

I don't know if you can continue something like this.

But I wouldn't mind seeing what you come up with.

hell yes!!!!!

This is so fucked up but hot..

I like the whole ground hog day theme you got going on here

I don't like how the story repeats itself. This made the story very confusing. Otherwise it was a very good story.

Was very good, will love to read more if you keep going

Wow! That was the strangest piece Ive read in a while! At first I thought you had accidentally dropped a copy/paste at the end of a section, hehe, took me a bit skimming to realize something was fishy and I went back to that spot and started reading forward again.

Funky magic crystal? Hehe. I wonder how many more revisions they will have before it stops? Boy, if he ever figures out what is going on things could get really interesting!

I wonder if he is going to 'regret' himself clean out of any pussy? Hehehe!

Thanks for the awesome read!!

Half way through the story it started over. Like you hit the paste button twice. You really should have read it before you hit submit

Repeating was kinda the point, if you read it properly. The flashback parts could have been compressed the second time round though, we only need to know what's different at that point.

Is the protagonist in some sort of hell, doomed to repeat and never finding a version he can accept? quite the horrorshow.

Loved the feel of it. Very different from your Lovecraft themed stories

Ther e was a repeat of the first two pages. On pages one 3 and 4. Thus one is left hanging.

Your stories were much better than this. The plot is lacking any feal flavour except sex.

Anonymous poster reread it. It's not a repeat. It's all in the details. Good read.

Big brother must be a sexual superman to be able to fuck so much so often LOL

total rubbish, one star

Not my cup of tea, I’m not into the degradation, but it was very well written. The story was coherent, and detailed enough that I could form a clear picture in my mind. 5 stars.

I liked this a lot. Kinda Groundhog Day but also Dark Tower; where he makes slightly different decisions but doesn't consciously remember the past ones. I don't think I want you to continue the story because eventually it would lead to him rejecting his mom the first time and probably breaking the loop. Good story overall though