by wantsomefun1951
Your story is well written the only problem is the story kind of petered out at the end. (I'm sorry I just had to say that) Thanks for the great read.
A good read and made me smile at the end. Thank you for putting this story out there.
Chy, great comment! I was going to say that ol’ Gerry just limped away after the pussywhipping he got.
1951, great story, good writing, believable characters, super ending.
Just three ultra-miniscule quibbles
“fart parties." Sounds like real fun. Just pass the baked beans and raw cabbage. Like “Blazing Saddles”.
“discrete”, should be “discreet”. Discrete means separate pieces, like “Each subsidiary was a discrete entity.” Whereas “discreet” means “careful and circumspect in one's speech or actions”, like “The sponsors of the BDSM fuck-a-thon thought it best to be discreet, as the participants included members of the clergy and local government officials.”
“tax-free”. Nope, sorry, self-employment income. File Form 1040, with Schedule C and Schedule SE. Or Myra might file Form SS-8 and ask for classification as employee. But never let the facts get in the way of the truth (or truthiness).
Terrific twist. God you are a wondeful writer. Beautifully paced plot with a great cast of characters. Fell in love with Maya. Thank you wantsomefun for thoroughly entertaining me with your story!
In Australian ballocks are what you may guess and the comment is made only to those who have the ability, courage and ballocks to make it.
Maya has it in spades.
Poor Gerry, he's lost his boyish charm! The bloom is off the roses, his vorpal sword hangs limply waving in the breeze.
I would hope that his male secretary is available to provide Gerry with a manly shoulder to cry upon.
I'd say she definitely got her revenge, and then some... ROFLMAO...
When you almost find yourself out on the streets with no money, no food and no prospects, survival is usually your only goal. Not only did she pull herself out of the financial hole he dug for her, she seems to have cost him a great deal of respect and trust at his place of employment. Pretty good revenge as far as I see things.
“I've never done anything like that before," Maya said.
"Neither had I, well, not since fart parties," Fran said.
LOL. I couldn’t even continue past that. Still laughing!
Fart parties... man, that there’s some funny stuff
I gave 4* only because it felt incomplete. I guess there could be a case for letting the reader use their imagination, but that’s not as fulfilling as reading the full revenge to which the bastard is subjected.
MAYA IS AN ANNOYING BITCH OF A CHARACTER.
WHEN SHE FIRST SEES HER HURBAND WITH HIS SECRETARY, THE STUPID WIFE GOES ON A REVENGE AFFAIR.
TOO STUPID TO KNOW ONCE A CHEAT ALWAYS A CHEAT.
THEN SHE BECOMES ALL SO SAINTLY AGAINST MAKING A PORN VIDEO!!
STUPID WIFE
Fran the bitch friend getting them drunk instead of the two bitches acting on what happened...just another clueless wife use with her own life
And he tells them "guys...meet my slutty ex-wife. I haven't found her attractive since I found her getting gangbanged in our bedroom. It was a little traumatic. Not sure why she's stalking me, but..." Good luck proving he's lying!