All Comments on 'Choices Ch. 02'

Stick with one point of view.

Yeah, maybe stick with one point of view, but regardless, I love these characters and this story. I want more!!

Great story, now got to wait for the next part to come. I wish I was Brandon an had to figure out what is going on. He should now know that stella is not the one he had at the party.

Dude now has three female devils and they are conniving. I'm really liking this story. The point of view does switch, you should watch that. I'm seeing some words screwed up that cause me to try to figure what you meant. Keep up the story work and be sure you review before you publish. An editor may be helpful if you want to try that.

RS

Sorry, but I don't agree - you handled the points of view very well and added to the depth of your story. Looking forward to next chapter.

Great STORY!!!! I really liked it... the 2 different views made me see both sides.. TO HELL with all the people that have to nit pick some one else s work.... if you this is it so damn easy... put your name on your post and link to a story you have written...

She needs out of this story! I really hope we find out why dad hates Brandon so much. Could it be because Uncle Randy is his dad? Love the story, except Kim's part! There is enough substance without her!

kim gives them a cover but monnie needs to get brandon and her straight. if randy is his dad then it needs to be brought out, but i get the feeling dada wants monica for himself.

Just as interesting as the first part, Hope you keep it going. Thanks for your time and effort.

Liked it!

Great storyline keep it up

All in all it was a very good story. I liked the game play of verse between the two main characters, the details of each of the scenes and the portrayal of family dysfunction.

My only main issue is with the word "then." It was used incorrectly in so many places that it detracted from the smoothness of the story. The "then"s being spoken of are those that should have been "than." Too often these days I see this error on Literotica. Fix it and you'll be gold.

Again, good story.

sinwizard

I absolutely love it!! There needs to be another installment soon. It's so cute, romance, and a little bit horny ayy?~?!

A lot of erotic love and sex going on in this story.

I hope that he kicks his dad ass for what the old bastard did to him when he was a kid.

He must be his Uncles kid for his dad to hate him so much.

I hope that Monnie finds a way to get him in her life sexually.

Thanks for the read.

The second Chapter was just as well received as the first and i cannot thank you all enough. I will not say if anyone has guessed right or wrong, but i like that you are thinking about the future of the story. Chap 3 should be up today, and 4 is finished, i just need to add the finishing touches. Thank you all for the support.

Choices101

Great writing.

Kim has got one good friend for life there ...

their "Plan" is good. so many typos or wrong words I assume English is not the Author's first language. That takes the edge off the story. Minor complaint. Hope that Monica gets Brandon eventually and we learn about his dad's reasons for the abuse