by FinalStand
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Funny and insightful. Oh yeah and very sexual too.
I was struck before reading this how much sex there ... isn't.
Especially actual vaginal penetration - this episode probably has more than most. It's just one hell of a great story, with quite enough sex to keep it on-topic.
I love that Zane is not some incredible fuck robot with a huge tool: '"Fuck, this thing is huge," Tara gasped ... I had to imagine she had a flair for the dramatic.' He thinks he's pretty normal, and though he clearly isn't, he isn't so incredibly well endowed - or even incredibly smart - that your readers can't imagine that with just a little more luck, they could have been Zane.
Keep it up!
Nice!
Wondering what the next story will be? The party who maybe turns into a big orgy!
Erotica may be sex stories, but it's always good when the author makes his/her creations people. Giving them a life past the bedroom is a plus with me. And the fact I can actually see their faces and hear their voices as I read is phenomenal. Every time Zane or anyone made a snarky comment had me laughing loud and long. Especially Rio and the pregnancy scene with Coach Gorman. That was hysterical!
It's this chapter with "1 in 10" which make you such a good author. You should release both series in a compendium with the subtitle 'Rape: why tacit consent, isn't'
Thanks very much again, I love your work, I have bought all the amazon editions of 'New Hire' and am anticipating the next chapter with patient impatience.
Paul Birchenough (Preposterous)