All Comments on 'Christmas Morning'

Omg this was the most really good story can't wait for ch. 2 let me know when u write ch 2. (wb5335@yahoo.com).

hot and flowed very well....part 2 soon please

I was interested until you mentioned the drug use.

there were a lot of errors grammatically which turned me off

You need to proof read your work. Very distracting!

what was wrong with the drug use?

I liked it and am looking forward to the continuation but you should proof read more to avoid errors

What was the point mentinioning drug use? It didn't do anything for the story, in fact it made a flaw in the story..

A sweet, sexy story. I agree, though, about the need for better proofing.

Very sweet story. Brings back memories for me. He and I never got (quite) as far as these two, but close. I still think about it years later.

Allison

I hope that the two of them keep the love affair going and have a lot more sex.

Perhaps having his sister to be more like a wife to him is what he needs to settle down and make a life for the two of them.

I'll be waching for the next chapter.

Thanks for the good read.

very nice, what annoyed me were the people bitching about the drug usage. blah blah stop whining. it's just a story and you are not perfect

I really liked this story, sweet and loving stories are my favourite type. Hope there will be a part 2, maybe where he moves back and they get a place together.

once again we get only the middle of the story no begining and no end. if you aren't going to write a COMPLETE story then don't write anything half a story (and this is less than half) is worse than no story at all. do all readers a favor and delete this and start over FROM THE BEGINING. who wants to read a book if the first and last chapters are missing or watch a movie if they get there late and leave early it is a waste of time. find a good editor and do a total rewrite but delete this one first.

I thought this story wasn't too bad at all. It's really unfortunate you did not follow it up. The only constructive criticism I would have is that it seems that you may have changed your mind midstory about writing in the first pertson. Other than that, it was entertaining and a great read.

Just finished reading your other stories, very good and lot's of promise!

Keep going this is just getting really good

WHY DID YOU STOP? YOU WERE ON TO SOMETHING.

I enjoyed your writing style and loving content. I read Camping Trip first and looked for part II but to no avail. So I read this story also. Hope you get this and consider taking up writing again.

Ron

PS you icon is beautifully composed

dumped on the story describing the fucking jerk hero as a fucking druggie asshole.