by Evil Alpaca
It took a little doing, but I figured out the character relationships. This excellent story is a shade behind the other one because of the minister father's characterization. El barfo. The chessplaying subplot was a neat touch. I play (and teach) the game myself. Wonder if the young lady will play for UCLA or wherever she winds up? More than casual interest here because I'm a member of the team at my old university and try to organize events there, without much success. Would love to see that subplot followed up. I suspect that in Alaska most chess play is done on the Web -- there is no mention of that in the story. Even the jackass minister would have to be aware of the Internet. Except for him, this is an excellent story. I wonder whether the two couples will meet later on. I wouldn't expect anything sexual to go on between non-partners, but the young ones might befriend each other and do things casually.
I like the way this meshed with you Alice's Restaurant that you submitted today also.
You are one of the best writers to grace Literotica. Please keep up the fantastic stories!!!
With increasing fascination of your skills I would like to add a lot more to say hoiw much I enjoyed this, much as I enjoyed Aleice's restaurant. Now that we have seen all four of the women up close and very personal, my day is so enjoyably complete. Thank you, thnak you, thank you.
I read all four parts of the series, and the were all fantastic. I am amazed at your storytelling ability, engrossing characters, meaningful storylines, LOTS of emotion.
I am looking forward to more of your work, and hoping for more based on these characters.
CUDOS!!!
I am making the same comment on all four parts because they all deserve it.
It reminded me of the upbringing I had, I should have left aswell.
Can't wait for the second part!! One of the best stories I have read for a long time!!!
Hmmmmm, INTERESTING! gonna reserve comments for next installment.
Great start though!
I always enjoy your stories you certainly have a way with words.
We'll done. Good story development with great pace. Thoughtful and thorough . Wonderful characters.
but ran out of SciFi. Exceptional job developing the characters, in this and Alice's Restaurant I. Of course, wouldn't expect any but from an alpaca...
...of the evil variety. LOL
Thanks,
GeoD
They pray love peace forgiveness and more of such soulful elements but most are not able to live up to this ...... Humans are shameless in between talking and acting ........ But some getting lucky finding a soulmate ...... 💖💝🍀
Really enjoyed another excellent story, thanks great to have discovered you.
Good characterization and build up, very believable progression. A well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.