by robcub32
what happened to the happy endings..... that story wasn't happy at all..it broke my heart to see him in that position...life isn't always happy..so i need all the happiness i can get.. lately i'm been coming to you for that burst of happiness...that story was just depressing
I love all your stories and I have to agree with the other comments. I really don't like this ending if this is the ending. I hope you continue with this story and make that jerk Bart go away.
So i hope theres a part 3 because if this is the end then it would suck. Not saying that all stories have to be happy endings just closure. I wish he could see how Bart is using him and that scene in the bar is NOT okay. I hope he finds someone special that will treat him right and not backtrack to either Gordie or Bart. Because by the time Bart is finished with him he'll be an emotional wreck
I am loving this story. I can't wait for the next chapter. I love almost all of your stories but this one really strikes a cord; we don't always have the happy ending and if we do, we have to go through alot of crap to get to it. Keop up the good work.
I'm begging you, let Clark meet a nice, caring man. This chapter was well-written, but seriously disturbing. It made me want to cry. But I really love your stories! Keep 'em coming!
You are definitely making us work for our story and I like that. Your first submissions were great but now you are really expanding your storytelling horizons- the path to HEA is not always easy or meant to be. Thanks for writing!
I love this story but it's breaking my heart. I hope Clark finds somebody who loves and treats him right SOON.
I love your writing style and the emotions that you exude through your stories....but please can one of your characters NOT have a 4.5" cock? I understand that it's part of your creative process to make your characters like the person they are based on, but it's becoming a bit formulaic despite the plot being so interesting. Change it up a bit. Please. Thank you.
I gave it 5 stars because you deserve them all...but really, Clark, seriously... i'm gonna slap you for being so...Clark. And i'm gonna kick Bart in the shin and run like hell for being such a gigantic tool. I still love you...no worries :)
You are definitely one of my favorite authors, I love EVERY ONE of you stories....except this one. Poor Clark.
i loved the idea of clark getting over gorden but to go with a character like bart.... i love all ur stories but this chapter is not one of my favorites. i just hope clark comes to his senses.
I have luved all your stories except this one. I hope to the Gods that Clark wakes up soon or he is going to be in big trouble with that one.
I hope there is a third chapter to this story. Bart's manipulation and harshness with Clark will only escalate. It only seems that Bart becomes more affectionate after Clark has to loose someone he loves or has to suffer for his love of Bart. You have written characters that were dominant but none as selfish and bullying as Bart. I wonder whatever happened to Bart's previous lovers?
I really love your stories but this chapter really made me mad. I can't stand controling jerks like that and Clark can do way better.
Clark needs a happy ending and this is not it.
I DO love your writing though.
I really wish you would have gone another direction with this chapter. I love all your stories but this one. This poor kid is made out to be a Door Mat. I hope the next chapter takes a sharp turn.
I agree that Bart is a nasty character, but there are lots of men like Bart who treat women or male partners like dirt and get away with it for years. I know that we love your stories for their escapist romance, but the gay world is full of violence and nastiness, as well as a very few loving and tender situations. So I don't think that your readers should complain when real life creeps in to a story. Also Bart has a point in complaining about Clark's weepiness. Many men suffer agonies without bursting into tears.
I love this story because it's relatable. I understand why some readers are uncomfortable witht this story because it isn't happy and romantic but some people really find themselves in these situations and it's refreshing to read a story that acknowledges that. Great work. Really love your stories!!
this is creeping me out.? i am waiting for something bad to happern.this bart is a fucked up nutter
nope this does not feel right bart is very abusive he is grooming clark for bitch hood he even shared him in the gay bar i didn't like it clark was separated from his family and his friends purposely by bart i dont like where this is headed but i'm reading on i hope gordie comes back and saves him from bart and his horrible way of being affectionate.
Fuk Bart having been in a relationship like this i kno what Clark is going through i would love to tell Bart to fuk off
I have read about 90% of your stories, and this one is totally different you have this abusive dick turning a sweet man into a Bitch. saying real men don't cry thats bull shit. Id deck Bart and I am Finding it hard to read more. if this ends with them being together still i might snap......loved all your other stories. <3
so very upset! Unfortunately, this is the cycle of violence you see.... Hope Clark finds some self esteem. Who will rescue him?!?!?!?!
i really enjoyed all of your other stories but this one just made me sad. i wasn't sure if i was supposed to like bart, but i sure didn't :( you're stories tend to have one submissive man in them, but this one was too far. i felt so sorry for him :( especially the part where bart peed on him.... how horrible
Not the writing, but the content with Bart. He is just awful, so so awful and Clark really needs to man up and tell him to bugger off.
I have loved all your other work, this one is not the same, it is like there is something missing
I love all of your stories, but this one has a dark and depressing tone to it. Clark deserves better than Bart, and if he doesn't leave him soon, I have a feeling something really bad is gonna happen too him ): and it'll be much worse than having Bart pee on him
Throughout Clark's story he has been portrayed as a weakling, as doormat to be abused both mentally & physically. Even the 4.5" penis wisecracks that the writer brings forth thru Clark's voice and his alleged lovers/ nothing like destroying a man's self-image. I was in an abusive cheating relationship till I moved out and left the lying, cheating prick behind. Took me years from one nights to flings before I found the right man who loved me UNCONDITIONALLY. Clark deserves his prince charming too. Clark's parents show much support that Clark doesn't seem to want but he needs it. I find Clark's treatment by Gordie & Bart jealous,control freak BF very distasteful in too many ways.
Well... that was interesting...
As I understood, brat is very dominant "papa master"
And that's no really my thing.. lol
But still, he is a MAJOR asshole and I kinda.. well, really hate his guts!!
The golden shower he gave Clark was WAYYYY too much!!
Is ok only if both sides are OK with that... otherwise, its just plain humiliation!!
Pour Clark... I still can't see why would he WANT to take that all in...
Pour pour Clark.
Clark is such a sweet guy. Why does he keep getting suckered into relationships with these guys who don't deserve him? He should go home to his parents, they are the only ones who love him unconditionally. It's a pity he can't see that.
It is amazing how compliant Clark is with Bart after his love affair with Gordie. It is as though Bart simply wants to own and dominate Clark, with the occasional bit of tenderness thrown in.
In some Bart is very generous, but only as long a Clark does his bidding, and his sex urge seems to be the dominant part of his personality.
In some ways one feels like telling Clark that you are only getting what you deserve.
Sorry, "robcub32", but this story is so disappointing after all your wonderful stories I read before: "Bobby and the Cop", "Mac the Mechanic", "The Parson's Son" etc.
Best wishes from Patrick (Spadger2).
Bart seems to have a split personality. One minute he is loving and caring, but he always seems to want to be sexually dominating, and everything has to go his way. If he really cared for Clark, he would not have allowed him to be used in a blow job by the rough guy in the gay bar's back room.
At the same time, Clark seems to be very naive in continuing to trust Bart and his protestations of love - Just bullshit!