All Comments on 'Click Ch. 03'

you took the P.O.S. part two and made it work with this. well done!

what a chapter, what revelations. teachers, family, all the new girls and now the seizure. Damn good read. I love the way this is taking shape. By the looks of it, I'd say this story has moved to the top 5 of my list of all time favorites/ ty/ bill

I like the way you brought things around. I think he was dumb for giving the information that he did to Mr. Reilly. I just think that might come back to haunt him. And when is he going to read the damn letter that the substitute Advanced Biology teacher gave him. It obviously couldn't be from the Hermetic Order of the Silver Twilight, since he just came from the class where he met Reilly. The only thing I noticed was that 'the Queen Bitch of the school's ' name changed from Brandy in chapter 2 to Brenda in this one. That is very unusual for you Lost Boy, but not a real problem for me. So still 5*. Thank you!

LB, your imagination has always left me in awe but to turn around a story from so awful to brilliant is just amazing :)

I love your storyline and can hardly wait to see what's next!

I look forward to every chapter so hurry. with the next lol

Thank you! Please keep the chapters coming.

Awesome series!! Please keep the chapters coming! Thanks!

I'll keep saying it until you don't need one any more

Brandi/Brenda? Which one is it?

walking through the cave barefoot and he doesn't ever notice or comment?

He's holding a two foot long crustal in his hand when he surfaces in the pool and Brandi/Brenda doesn't notice until he puts it down??

I know you HAD to tie a secret society in (being you) but not even an naive 18 year old would have revealed family secrets to a stranger on first meeting

And the normal complement of mis-used words and horrendous sentence structure

(Nice tap dance, BTW with the apology to his mother and sister. But that is all it is. A tap dance

That whole orgy scene needs to go away in a major re-write)

It's "rappelle", not "repel".

Don't you just love it when one of the asshole nit-pickers corrects you and gets it wrong too? The word isn't either "repel" or "rappelle"; it's "rappel".

I guess I should have googled that one... : )

... he starts spilling his guts to multiple total strangers?? Seems kind of weird after he saw the extent to which Carlotta has gone to preserve her anonymity, but I'll see where this goes for the time being. I'm just hoping the wheels don't fall off after crafting a unique backstory. Thanks for the ride so far.

5* chapter! Good work

Brenda's agitation, her warning, Carl hiding, the guy's pumping for information.

How many hints does he need to shut up?

Great story! I'm glad you nixed the whole gangbang family idea. Awesome job though!

I DID'NT COMMENT ON THE LAST CHAPTER BECAUSE I ACTUALLY FELT SORRY FOR HIM ALLOWING HIMSELF TO PIMP HIS MOTHER AND SISTER. IT MADE ME ANGRY. HOWEVER, WITH THIS CHAPTER HE WAS BROUGHT INTO THE LIGHT, WHICH I APPRECIATE OF THE STORY. THANK YOU BRENDA! THIS IS AN AMAZING STORY AND I REALLY WISHED I'D HAVE BEEN THE EDITOR THAT PROOFED YOUR STORY YEARS AGO, IT "IS THAT GOOD".

A most wonderfull written story.

You real name has to be S. King! ;-)

Loving this, great imagination ... 5*

I love an entertaining story, and this is one of them! Thank you!

Now that I realise we are dealing with a sci-fi story all is clear, I’m absolutely loving this story. Am looking forward to the rest of it.

I agree with the previous comments by Wargamer. I take it all back as well… I wasn’t going to continue on reading this story after the last chapter but curiosity got the better of me and I’m glad it did.

Chapter three page one, t-bar is a fence post not underwear...fix it with t-back.

Almost stopped after the flawed last chapter. Way to recover. Great story

I'm enjoying the plotline and character development, but as things progress it's got some major flaws.

The story started strong with a single interesting concept, but with all of the additional elements that you've introduced, it's become muddled. You'd be better off sticking with just the original concept, or adding at most only one other extraordinary element to the plot.

I stand by my comment on the previous chapter!! AND I wish to say that THIS CHAPTER COMPLETELY VINDICATES what I said...

Brenda knocks fire from Steve's fanny, and brings him down quite a few notches!! Then he did EXACTLY what he had to do...APOLOGIZE to Mom and Sister!! Which they did, and still love him!!

He steps up, and realizes he has to do the right, AND MORAL, thing!!

How this has now transitioned to a Science Fiction/Harem/Stroke story...SSSOOO wonderful to see something this entertaining!!

FIVE**5**STORY...FOR SURE...YYYYYAAAAAYYYYY!!!!! 🌋🌋🌋🌋🌋🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥💞💞💞💞💞🌌🌌🌌👉👉💥💥💥💥💥💯