All Comments on 'Click Ch. 09'

Oh, the goddess that was on the island is waiting for John right? When she stated she was waiting for her love. Is this the end of the Click series too, and will this plot continue in the iron bitch series? Anyways, I hope you keep writing. Good to have you back.

Same question as dragon. Nick/ Jon/ Steve, I have enough of recall (despite all meds and pain meds) for now . I just hope you already have a direction and all mapped out in your fantastic mind already to start the next story.. tie in all 3 now that they are all supreme now? Thank you for supplying me with such great stories to read and allow my mind to go elsewhere other than to sit here in my 24/7 disabled self taking meds. ty bill

I enjoyed most of this story, your imagination is very creative. I wish you the best of luck. If possible, consider using an editor, as there are parts that could be improved. Some of your paragraphs are painful to read. I mean this in the best way possible, although signing this as Anonymous does nothing to prove this. Thank you for writing this story.

I enjoyed reading this one also. I also enjoyed how it tied it's self ti the Nick Shaw story.

I truly liked this story up until this last chapter. I understand you had to end it sometime and somehow, but this just blew me away as to how you did so fast. Although I didn't like the ending I still give the story an overall score of 4.5 stars.

You have had me stuck to this story for three days.

Talk about your inside out and up side down stories.

This thing has more turns, but all so would not let me

stop reading till the end.

I truly enjoined this story.

This story was better then most movies couldn't stop reading

The story kept me riveted, you should be writing novels!

Overall it took me 2 days to read all the chapters. I actually lost track of time and stayed up till 4am the first night. It was riveting and well thought out. Although i kinda hated the ending, what can you do ?

All in all , one of the best series on literotica i have read so far, and I've read alot of them over the years.

I hope he eventually comes up with a follow up story.

Couldn't put it down until I finished the story. Ending was different than I expected but overall one of the best I've read.

I am glad you enjoyed the story. I am sorry if the ending was unexpected or not to your liking. Sadly not all the heroes wind up where they want. Thanks for reading and i hope to post something soon.

Loved the story. Very interesting world and characters. I wish there weren't so many inconsistencies but, I guess it can't be helped with a story this complex.

Absolutely spectacular. I'm going to read the Nick stories again for a better understanding. Again....spectacular

What started as a simple erotic story. Turned into a story I simply had to read to the conclusion.

I congratulate lost boy on an excellent read.

Very good story I feel for the kid so that tells me you did a fine job keep up the good work

l both loved and hated the ending

DAMN WHAT AN ENDING. I'D LOVE TO SEE THIS MADE INTO A MOVIE, lol IT'D HAVE TO AN XXX BUT DAMN! I NEVER WANTED IT TO END AND ALTHOUGH I HATE STORIES WITH DEATH, THIS STORY LEFT ME FEELING EMPTY INSIDE. NOT QUITE SURE IF I UNDERSTOOD THE FUTURE BETWEEN CUM SLOT MOM AND FIONA THO! OH WELL, DAMN WHAT A STORY. FUCKIN A LOST BOY, BEST STORY I'VE EVER READ HERE. THANK YOU VERY MUCH! I WANT TO DISCOVER AN ALTERNATE EARTH WITH WOMEN THAT CAN TAKE A BIG COCK IN THE ASS WITH NO LUBE, DAMN IT FEELS SOOOO GOOD! OH YEAH AND CAN SWOLLOW A COCK THE FIRST TRY! FUCKIN A!

I do not normally read multichapter stories on here but your's was amazing. You have a true talent for weaving a story that entrances the reader. Bravo.

Your multichapter story was amazing. You have a true talent for weaving and entrancing the reader. Bravo, chapo!

I have waited until I finished the entire series to comment.

This is probably one of the best written novellas I have read in a long time. It is better written than many mainstream sci-fi offerings out there. The sex, as intense and graphic as it is, is almost an afterthought to the true story. I enjoy the sex scenes but the gem here is the core achievement.

First let me say I love your writing BUT I will not read any more of your stories. They are well written and very entertaining but then just tear me apart by the end, I just can't do it again.

Loved the build up and caracters but felt really rushed at the end. I think you could have kept going since it was so good.

Wonderful story not a fan of the evil end but well written made me laugh with the take that and that in the sex scenes lol hoped he would be the voice of good maybe get his humanity back and save the world nice story though

Loved it beyond words

Only slight criticism would be a little too much sex involved, it might sound stupid but 1/2 pages of the same continuous bombardment multiplied by multiples of sex is a slight overload and unwarranted.

Your imagination has no bounds.

congratulations,

4.9* 👍🏾

0.1 deducted for too many sex scenes 🤷🏼‍♂️ 🤪

Well done! Thank you for sharing this with us!

I really really enjoyed this story until the end. I hate mindfucks and you turning steve into the the driving force of humanities extinction was a big one. I wish to god that there was an epilogue. So I'm making one up in my mind. Right before he fully succumbs, the phoenix stone on his head glows brightly and suddenly his mind is his own again. The Goddess appears before him and says "It's you. I know I had to wait." She then explains some things such as his fate and destiny are his own and always has been. That is why he never appears in any of the foretold prophecies. He can shift his appearance at will now. He uses this to deceive his father and works with Nick to save humanity and has the hidden master of the order added to the council. He finds out that Melody and her clan knew his father was planning something and Steve was pivotal to his plan so they had tried to control him to subvert his father's plans. Once he knows this he tracks her down and invites her into his life. Using his newfound abilities he awakens the hunter and has her track down others that are instrument in his father's plans and between her killing some of them and Steve using his phone and changing them his father's and Yog's plans are thwarted. His father finally catches on and they face off and when Steve is losing The hunter arrives with his created cat defender and they manage to subdue him in the house using the inescapable chains. The AI's finally find out where Steve's son is and they bring him home which is now the underwater lab. A little time passes and his longing for his sister grows so he meets up with them and explains everything that happened. His sister moves to the underwater lab and his mother moves in with her sister and after more time has passed she decides to stitch around when he visits his aunt and her lover. She finally gives in to the lust building up and although she stays with her sister she regularly joins in on the fun. Steve teaches and trains his son and when he is old enough (he ages differently so even though it's been 18 months he is about 10 years old.) he finally meets his mother. She feels horrible about what happened and how she reacted and is begging him to forgive her and she promises to always be there for him when it is revealed that all along Steve has been singing her praises and Ben (the son's name) loves his mother. He lets her know he completely understands the situation and it's would have been harder if not impossible for them to meet beforehand for her sake and also because he was dangerous until he learned to control his abilities. Steve comments you were really lucky you missed the diaper changing phase. It's only lasted a few months but those nightmares are forever. Everyone laughs and then The Goddess speaks up and says "It's a good thing you have mastered them because we will need your help with my and Fiona's babies. Thats right love we are both expecting." Steve is about to pass out with fear thinking the same thing will happen to them where she speaks up again and says "Have no fear future husband, I have seen all of ours's and all your children's fates. You have nothing to worry about. I promise." Her promise comes true. Millennia has passed and Steve and his family have found the secret to prolonging life. They have barely aged as the Dark Sun approaches. Yog has been growing stronger and is able to extend ethereal tentacles out from the void. He believes he has won and even though his plans for preparation has been greatly delayed he knows he is going to finally be free. He reaches out to extend even more tentacles when Steve and his family have finally made the breakthrough they needed from measuring the forces at work to counteract them. Yog senses them approaching and starts to taunt them and asks if they have finally come to surrender to the inevitable. when Steve tells him "No. We came to say goodbye. We will seal you away forever. But first, we will deliver your servant to you. He was tough but finally cracked after 3000 years. He feels he owes a penance for all the evil he has done. The millions of lives he has cost and the trillions he planned to take. When we finally broke your hold on him we realized how to defeat you but didn't mind the help he offered on avoiding the calamity you thought would bring you salvation. You strive on darkness, despair, and hatred. We are here to bring you goodness, happiness, and love. This will close your rift and seal you away." "I AM ETERNAL!! YOU CANNOT DEFEAT ME!!!!" Yog bellowed. "THE DARK SUN WILL EMPOWER ME BEYOND ANYTHING YOU CAN DO!!! I WILL BE UNLEASHED ON IT'S ZENITH AND YOU WILL PAY FOR YOUR INSOLENCE!!!!" "That may be true." His father said stepping out of the shadows "But that's only if the Dark Sun gets close enough to penetrate the void with its rays. They have worked tirelessly for the past few millennium to complete and place wormhole generators they have developed. This will act as a chain reaction to a black hole that best guess is at least a yottasecond of time away if not more. That will give them plenty of time to make more permanent solutions." He said. Steve chimed in "Of course if for some small reason we haven't figured it out before then we can always adjust the generators and send the Dark Sun right back effectively resetting the clock. We can do that for as long as we need. Infinitely if needed. So yes we may never defeat you. But you will never be free. Dad are you sure you want to go? This is permanent. Forever is a long time even for you." Yes son I have to do this. Perhaps I can make changes in his dimension and learn to help defeat him once and for all if ever the time comes." "Okay Dad. We are about to start." Steve said. Immediately Fiona and Cassie stepped to his side and started removing their clothes. "Goodbye Son. I love you." his father said as he stepped into the rift. "I WILL CONSUME YOU AS I DID BEFORE!!! YOU CANNOT WITHSTAND ME!!!" All attention was diverted as everyone in the group started to remove their clothing and kissing a groping each other. The Goddess took her place on Steve's mighty cock as Cassie sat on his face. The fingers on his left hand plunged into Fiona while his right hand explored his mother's labia. This kicked off the orgy full of love and happiness that's sealed the dark influence of that foul dimension forever. It lasted 5 straight days even though the rift was closed on the third. They were so consumed in each other no one had noticed. The gateways worked to perfection and the Dark Sun was transported so far away that Yog would have to exist stewing in his known defeat.

Yes I suck at writing but I think yall get the gist of how I think it should have ended.

Wow, what a great story and what an imagination you have BUT for me the ending was the complete opposite I was hoping for and was slightly disappointed. I knew Steve wouldn’t need up with Akira and live happily ever after because I read Iron Rain before this story. I was hoping Steve would end up helping Nick with his new World Order and kept his little Harem. The ending for me was quite unexpected and sad actually knowing that he was not only Nicks enemy now but the human race and knowing that he would have to destroy all the women that he loved…After saying all that I still gave you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

i like your ending better mediocreginger :-)

I was very into this one. Moreover than I thought I would be. But I have to side with mediocreginger. I was at a loss when his aunt/mother lost her mind. Understandable all things considered, but Steve becoming a monster was not as much of a shock as him becoming Nick, and all humankind's enemy killed the story for me. But you get 5 stars for your incredible talent for storytelling. What people who read these stories need to realize is, whether you like the way it all played out or not, it is just that. A fiction, a tale, a story told for entertaining.

Man talk want dive bombing the shit out of the ending. Guess happily ever after just isn't your thing. Great writing but man just feels like a bit of waste with that let down if and finsh.

You have a great imagination, the story started rather well. You are a good writer but you introduced so many out of context characters late in the story and then your ending turned to shit. No fun or reasoning that makes sense and so many loose ends.

I have to comment on the most recent comments first, ha ha ha ha! As a retire senior editor, having read tens of thousands of novels, novella's, etc, etc,,, in almost every known genre, this was done right, right down to the ending! Literary wise, the Author could use a few college level courses in Literature but the ending was done "JUST RIGHT." Left me saying, "WOW!" What more could the Author say? He said everything pertinent to the ending, leaving it open for maybe 'A Second Chapter', damn sure I hope so. Excellent story! EXCELLENT! 5 BIG FAT FLAMING BRIGHT WHITE STARS! Excellent job LostBoy. I am now a faithful follower!

I’ve read six of your stories, it finally hit me… You’re a H. P. Lovecraft fan!!! You do his works great honor! 😊

Captivating!

Mike R

Wow!!!

Brilliant story and a great twist ending setting up for a second series maybe? With all the clues and leftover plot devices there is easily enough for you to revisit this world and again regale us with Steve's continuing tribulations. Until then definately worth ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Well, that was depressing. Brilliantly written and a great homage to his source material but, damn... I didn't see that coming at all.

H.P. level dystopia was not the right choice for me at the crack of dawn. Now I'll be bummed all day.

All that is just to say how invested in the story Lost Boy got me. You don't get bummed about characters you don't care for.

5 stars, given with a small sigh. Damn fine writing!

Just wow man.. wow. What a story! What a plot! What a fucking twist! I think you touched almost every damn genre with this..

Great story and it being set in the Lovecraft world just made it all the better. A very unique story , I couldn’t stop reading. It took me three days in my spare time but it was well worth it. 6 stars

Sorry...only four (4) Stars here...

Too many mistakes ("dessert"???...It is "desert"...hot sandy place. This was a MOST glaring issue, but there were others!!)

And, it went to long, run-on sentences/lack of correct punctuation.

Though I really did love the concept, Steve's transformation was just too fast to be acceptable to me.🥴😢

Was an amazing read