All Comments on 'Cometh Hither'

The buildup created tension ... then the release ... Not sure I like the last few lines though

Great erotic tension. So full of raw sex

I've had a passion for Victorian erotica for years. The Way of a Man with a Maid and The Adventures of Lady Harper being two of my favorites. I found it very refreshing to see that topic incorporated into your story. I hope you will consider furthering this storyline with additional chapters. I'd love to be a voyeur to their continuing adventures.

the story had just the right pace ... loved it much. please post the second part ASAP.

love

Well done! You captured the eroticism and were eloquent !

Oh PLEASE! Delete the very last line. It sticks a pin in the whole story that you so skillfully unwound. I suppose you thought it was in some way cute, or a juxtaposed irony? IMHO it's awful.

I really liked the way you dovetailed part one with this new addition. Very clever and even literary. Nice Job.

L O R

Both characters were well written and interesting characters. The sex was hot. I agree with the earlier commenter that the last "Penthouse letters..." line should be removed.

Thanks for the comments, feedback, and favorites, I really appreciate it. I also totally agree with the criticism of final lines in the original version and they have been changed. I originally included that last line (about Penthouse Letters) before most of the story was written, and I basically filled in the space in between the beginning and that line. Along the way, the tone of the story evolved into what it is now but those last lines remained the same and I think that resulted in a disconnect that more than a few people felt. After concentrating on the story, I pretty much forgot about those last lines even though they were always right there. I feel the new final lines are more appropriate and don't do disservice to everything that came(th) before. Thanks again, and glad you all enjoyed it.

This is hot! Time to re-read Nin, I think.

Seriously, this is great, in-the-moment prose that gets into the protagonist's head. I hope to read more from you! All three stories are superior.

I found one of your stories and immediately read all three. All excellent. Sometimes I too fear the Penthouse Letters effect but I've resolved to worry about it more when the readers are paying and when the critics are published (or even fully clothed). I encourage you to write more especially since you've set him up for a revisit with Cynthia.

This was one of the best stories I have read on here! Please keep writing.....

The best story I've read in a long time. Very erotic, great details. Please continue with them playing again.

I've read all three of your stories and I absolutely love them!!! Please write more. You're an exquisite writer

Like Molly, I too feel that there was the occasional grammatical mistake here and there, and perhaps some places were not properly structured.

But goodness.

What a story, Morgan! What a bloody story! My personal unhappiness is that he did not touch her breasts as often as I'd like, but he certainly did make up for that by exquisitely fingering her ;)

Well, anyhow, from now onward, this is how I'm asking to get fingered.

"Fingers. Pussy. Now, please," she commanded politely.

-Molly

The most awesome story I have ever read..... I was hard throughout the entire story.

I've found 'ending' a story is always difficult. Maybe it's a guy thing where one is 'spent' and can't find a way to continue cuz.....well, he's done!

But this is wonderfully engrossing and believable story and you sir (sir? Yes, I assume so), are very talented. But the ending.....specifically the last two paragraphs, not so much...... maybe replace with a phrase in italics that implies our First Lady is reading it, her fingers to her mouth......."oh my god," she whispers, "That..... that's us."

Yes.

Oh. My. Word.

Yes.

A lot of the work on this site is sooo obviously fiction, and this is so not. Fiction or no? Doesn’t matter. Grammar errors? Don’t matter. (Polished and error free is what you have after good and diligent editing.) Awkward dialog in an awkward ending? What is it I read somewhere once? ‘Messy sex is good sex, and good sez is messy.’ This is THAT. Good and messy. And real. I’ve read some really good stuff here; this might be the best.

I love reading the stories here, but that is all they are. ... until this one.

It is so well written it is all but real. I don't want it to end....

Oh my God! This story had me wet the entire time. Didnt cum yet...but I purposely denied myself. Gonna do it now. Keep the stories cumming!

Let me join your admirers. this is one of the shining jewels of Literotica !

Simply masterful (mistressful?) in its unfolding heat.

Many thanks....

do Cynthia & Molly meet? i hope we don't have to wait three years to find out. this is the best written story i have read, here, in my three years of visiting Lit.

please, do not keep us waiting.

Yes, fascinating to see the older woman playing with the younger man in such a restrained way and to read it from the boys perspective. More often than not, less is more, just like real life. My submissions to LE are playful but ensure that more goes on their heads than in the real world. Great writing, keep it up...., and the writing.

I hate the stories entitled "Chapter 1, Chapter 2, etc. But I hope that there's a sequel, e.g., the next week, the next month, the next semester of the Shakespeare/Anais Nin classes!

Great story! And had me reminiscing.

Beating off for a (older) woman.

Story found my hand on my cock, pumping my manhood. My love tool was strong as a steel rod, a pleasure stick for her ...

More please.

That says it all.

So very hot, so well written. I will definitely read some of your other work.

Absolutely a stunner! Well written and it was easy to feel his inexperience and her total control. It was so stimulating by feeling the late afternoon or early evening light as both slowly removed clothing. The feelings of quiet solitude, despite being in the college, was so relaxing and erotic with no intrusion or the pandemonium so common throughout the halls.

I have only one very small negative comment. There were a couple places where the wrong word was used, which for me, just stops my immersion in the story like a boulder hitting a tranquil pond. I stop, look back and see something such as "I moved by hand down between us." What??

What editor could miss something so damn obvious. An editor should read every word aloud. Getting involved in the story is not the editor's job. The editor's job is primarily to make the author's words flow, not causing a mental train wreck for the reader. As I said, only a couple times, but they obviously caught my attention and possibly others'!

Thank you for such a well-written and mildly erotic story.

I scrolled up and down the list of titles checking out the offerings, as this was the first time I had ever visited this site. I have no idea why I chose this story, but it is without a doubt the most intense and erotic story that I have ever read. I think I just turned it into a regular visitor to this site.

I see you haven't continued to submit. I hope you've continued to write.

Just as Molly said ... WOW!

This was amazing...I don’t have many words beyond that.

A true jewel in a drawer of imitations. The most satisfying literate read in a long time.

What can I say that hasn't already been said? The story was fucking great and i have the bulge to prove it.

Thank you

This is truthfully one of the best stories I've found in this website. I hope you publish more in the future.

This is one of the best stories that I have read on Literotica. Keep writing please. Erotic and excellent.

Anais Nin's Delta of Venus was a favorite back in the 90's. Helped me realize I enjoy written erotica more than video porn. Then I found Literotica and all of its wonderful stories. Keep up the writing.

One of the best erotic stories I've read!

Great Story, I look forward to seeing more!

Absolutely amazing. I don't know what else to say. Amazing!

Didn’t make it to the end then went back to finish. Excellent sexual tension. Loved it.

This was a nice change for me - to see the male POV was interesting - details that as a woman, I hadn't thought about. Creative. Loved the connection of the narratives btwn his story, the story they were creating, and Anais Nin. Quite arousing! Loved the panty scene and how u brought them up again at the end. It felt really intimate and meaningful. Solid work! Congrats!

What an incredible story!!! Definitely in my top five favorites! Thank you for sharing!

This is a fantastic, creative and light-hearted story. What leaped out at me most was your absolutely perfect judgement of pacing - builds up as slowly as it needs to before picking up the pace at just the right point. Brilliant.

Write more!

This was, by far, my favorite story I’ve ever read here. And I’ve been coming here for many years. My sister was teaching English literature at a university of California school when she was 30. In 1991 I was fresh out of high school and moved to CA to live with her and work as the nanny to her kids. I imagine you, the writer, as a specific student she talked about wanting to introduce me to. She was stunningly beautiful and a terrible (wonderful) flirt and when I finally met the student (you) I could see he was hopelessly lost for her. I just loved this story so much. Sexy, yes, but also so sweet, funny and familiar. You are gifted. I haven’t read the other comments here, as I prefer to pretend I am the only one commenting, but I doubt very much that I am the only one more than a little bit smitten. I’ve had a really shitty couple of days and somehow your story reminded me of the innocent beauty in life and what it can be like to be respected and honored by a man who is simply happy to enjoy a woman’s body and allow her to enjoy his. Equal and loving even in its fleeting fugue. Thank you for sharing this.

God how i love this story just great writing. I love when Molly dims the lights in her office to begin reading. The anticipation in the young man's mind. How a look from Molly and he knows he has to begin to strip infront of her as she watches and reads christ that is so exciting and then to touch his erection for her to see just so so hot!!!🔥

Many years of erotica but this joins a special few. Will be long-remembered. So deliciously well-written.

Nice

This is a good story. I like the construct, the setting - and good grasp of the English language.

And it’s dead sexy!

Soon had my flagpole well upstanding...

Beautiful. One of the best. It cheered me up and reminded me of the potential of good erotica. This was sexy, personal and very well done. I wish there were a third and fourth chapter.

Excellent. Layered. Literate. So close to the characters that I'm not reading about voyeurs, I am the voyeur. Please, carry on.

AWE-some! I'm jittery with energy and full with admiration. Brilliant! Thank you!

Really well written and very hot. Thank you

Superb writing , very well conceived .

Well written and very arousing.

I felt like I was inside the story - inside of her - swimming.

More -

I absolutely love this story I have read it several times and it is great each time.

Sorry, man, only 5 stars this time! I didn’t find the button for 7.

Wow!! I skipped the first story, about Cynthia, and began this one, then thought better of it and I am GLAD I did!

You write magnificently. The tension of apprehension, being led, the assertiveness of the two Ladies…yeah, you did good.

And unlike the “standard” porn story or even CFNM story, you drew the sex out for last and set the focus so squarely on HER pleasure.

Tell more stories!

But it did happen, for all of us readers. That's what made the penthouse stories so very real, at least the good ones.

Thanks for the remembrance.

We're the stories sent in by readers or did the staff wright them ?

This was excellent. So many fantasies fulfilled.

All I can say is WOW for the story and 100% for the writing. Didn't plan on reading it all in one sitting but couldn't walk away until I finished. VERY arousing! I hope it was based on a real experience of yours, and if it was I'm insanely jealous.

So well written, too.I mean SO well...