All Comments on 'Coming Home Ch. 01'

What a fantasy, I have often had this fantasy. Please continue and tell the "Rest of the Story!"

You need to work on your use of English. The poor spelling, bad grammar and awkward sentence construction ruin what could have been an okay story.

i couldn't finish this so called story it was to unrealistic no guy would act that way as soon as he saw them he would have turned around and left slamming the door and if they tried to explain what was going on especially the way you said that they were afaid to ask because of his reaction a normal guy would have told them i would have been fine if you had been honest with me from the begining but now i never want to see either of you again then go back to college please keep it beleivable and realistic for a change

That was a great story! Keep up the good work!