by EenViezeVent
Great to have a new story from you. Wonderful writing, one of your best.
You have written some of my all time favorite stories, several of which I have read several , and each time is like the first time. Thank you for all of your hard work.
The other side would have been the state and I highly doubt Daniel would have been convicted of murder in those circumstances. Good story though. Your grammar needs cleaned up as usual
A good story despite the let down of reasearch into the details of the story plot line. Dramatic moments, fight scenes, police and court proceedures need to be closely linked to real life if possible to maintain a clear narrative that supports the other elements in the story. Enjoyable, 4*.
I loved the story. Great writing. A few grammar errors but still a excellent read.,
mommy and sissy become lesbo skanks. WIMP bro/sonny comes home AND we have another Author that knows NOTHING about female anatomy. LOL!!! 2 stars.
Please continue this story. Would love to read about mom and daughter each eating a creampie.
Please do a sequel. I would love to see him get his sister knocked up.
Where is the hymen, specifically? I mean, the way the story goes, Daniel could fuck Kira and she would still be a virgin (by the "unbroken hymen" definition). I don't have problems with imagination, but if the story is written about humans, it ought to keep body parts consistent with humans.
Like someone else said, they would have to prove "beyond a reasonable doubt" which is 98-99%. Even the slightest doubt of self-defense, and he's clear. Add on to that about good behavior, you made it seem like it was sprung on him in surprise, but that's not how it works. I worked in a military prison for 5 years, and the way good behavior is determined, is it's allocated FIRST, and one can only lose it, not gain it. Considering that he would know EXACTLY when he got out.
Another writer who refuses to believe that the aroma, and yes stench, of sex remains, especially when fluids soak into cushions. After the evening of sexual gatification, what happens if an unanounced visitor arrives? What if a doctor is needed immediately the next day? What if there were relatives who wanted to drop by to welcome home the son? Who would want to sit on the sofa/couch with the stench of soured sexual fluids?
As the three had nothing planned for the rest of the evening but sex, why not take it to the bedroom were just sheets and possibly a mattress cover could be easily replaced and the smell of sex confined to that room?
Writers, simply think before you begin to type. The smell of sex is going to linger for a while unless there is a means to dissipate that smell. If sex is performed on cushions and fluids leak, forget about dissipation, that smell and then stench is going to remain for weeks. For those who think that leather or vinyl is the answer, only partially.
Here again, we have a writer who, apparently has a great fear of religion as he continues to inject religious words in sex acts. First and foremost is the use of GOD. If you fear religion to such a degree why do you utilize the most sacred words on earth? Get a thesaurus (WordWeb is a FREE download dictionary, thesaurus plus online dictionaries) and find another word(s) to use. HEAVENLY is often used to describe the "afterglow" of sex. Why not use "euphoria"? Some will continue the use of sacred religious words. Why not be different and respectful to those who find such to be offensive?
Think about what you write as you type. Make your story unique. Have the characters think about their actions before or even as they engage in sex and how to reduce of eliminate the evidence if necessary and to protect the furniture. But most of all, be respectful of your readers.
What's next, older brother with twin younger sisters, Son with his mother and aunt?
Please don't add in descriptions of protecting the furniture to your stories like someone else suggested. Also don't change your wording like they suggested either, just because they are offended. If you catered to what people find offensive you would not even be able to write any story at all.
Good story, sounds like the Chinada justice system where they give you 15 years for defending yourself and your family from the dregs of society.
You just had to add a little crime to hype up the story which was literally a failure. Your interpretation of justice system is mediocre at best.
The part about the system is pretty accurate from my point as the system is set up that way. No such thing as innocent these days.
Lost me as soon as he got out of jail and found out the mom and daughter were together sexually. They were more interested in each other than him
Good story. Just one point, I think you meant to write, "deceased father," not, "diseased father," near the start. There's quite a difference in meaning. Ain't the justice a wonderful thing, NOT!
The story was generally pretty good. The jail for muder thing was a bit fetched, and the sibling deflowering was kinda mushy, though. Loved mom's sluttiness
Liked the story although part of it was kinda far fetched like 5 years for murder and his lawyer must have been an idiot not much of a defense like would he attack 3 men and what finger prints were on the knife and he was cut first and the people coming out after Kira screamed should have seen what happened!!! You should have wrote more of this story where Uncle Joe's place was going to have a party and maybe Kira gets pregnant!! 4 stars!!!!!!!
Wowww ... what a great story ... MORE than 5 stars ... So sensual, erotic, slow and with words very well picked. Please go on. Can't wait for more of your stories to come ... Thanks for sharing ..
Fantastic! I would love to read more about there future and the revenge on the two liars. Keep writing like this, please.
Uh that murder charge makes literally no sense. Drunk guy attacks you with a knife (so he was going to murder him and then rape the girls, very extreme, very not believable) and gets himself killed, but you do time even though you have witnesses there to back you up? OK what am I missing here? Seems like utter bullshit to me. Terrible plot development that is totally implausible given the circumstances. And why is there always a group of drunk/aggressive guys in these stories any time there is an event out to a bar or a club? Seems overused low-hanging fruit for shitty drama to pad the story.
Honestly, it's more believable that his mom and perfectly innocent virgin sister are in love with him and each other, and he is with them, than to believe the events that led to him being banged up for 3 years.
Pretty good story but need to study female anotomy and find out where the hyman is it is at the very begining of the vagina not up in a few inches.
To Anonymous who is offended by them having sex on the couch and by using the word God..who the fuck are you to tell the author to write something less offensive for you!!!There are multiple categories here,as there are multiple radio and TV channels.If you don't like what you see,hear or read.Change the channel,OR,find another story to read!!!The hell on from here with your don't offend the readers BULLSHIT! To the author of this story,keep being you.Dont cave to some liberal,offended by any and everything!!I promise there are way more people like me than that offend little bitch.Ive read many stories on Literotica,And,that is the first and only comment such as that I've ever seen.So,fuckem and feedem fish heads... lmao...A saying here in the low country of South Carolina,USA