All Comments on 'Confessions From An Affair Ch. 08'

The author did a wonderful job yet again.

She dealt with the emotions and setting of the time very nicely.

Well done.

Well, if you thought you attempts at making S Jackson a heroic figure with some crap about his wife and child being killed because they were black, you were wrong. If he were a good man he would not be taking another mans wife, espically a man overseas fighting for his life and his country. A brother in arms. He tells the wife good things about her husband, then fucks her. She would be considered the biggest slut in the country, then as well as today. Your writting is good but I won't read any more of you story. This is wrong on several levels, I don't like your attempts to make this terrible breaking of vows and oaths a love story. The husband deserves a lot more than a slut wife and a horney S Jackson keeping the home fires burning.

I love how this story is evolving. Your writing is growing with each chapter. Your plot is very realistic, as are your characters.

Now, to the gutless "Anonymous" comments. Grow up, go grab your sheet out of the closet. Maybe take an English class and learn how to spell.

Go back to the Loving Wives category with the rest of the swill.

Yes, I have deleted several comments left on this story. Ctiticisms of the story are fine. However, I will not be used as a platform for others to spew racist venom.

The error in the time frame has been pointed out to me in several emails. Oops. I goofed. This hasn't been the only factual error along the way, but it certainly was caught by the most readers. Maybe it was just a test to see if you were really paying attention : )

As for your other criticism about spouses accompanying their husbands - I have also heard from several WWII vets about that very subject. While they pointed out that it was inaccurate, they also said that they realized that it was just a story and it did little to destroy their enjoyment of it.

I appreciate the fact that you have followed the story. <i>Constructive</i> criticism is always welcomed. It's the only way to learn.

I don't usually interject myself in discussions like this, but I feel I need to support my fellow writer. Constructive criticisms are always welcome. Racist rants are not.

I don't think LM portrayed her story as being an historical account of WWII. Authors of all sorts sometimes bend history to make their story work. I think the term is literary license.

I completely support her decision to delete some of the comments, in fact I encouraged her to do so.

To the ignorant racists. If you don't like the story, don't read it. Go back to your closet and play with the sheet you having hanging there.

Heh, so on the second visit, she gives him a mercy fuck because she's feeling sorry for him and she's lonely.

Not sure it fits into the romance category. It looks more like a suitable part of the "loving wives" section.

It was not appropriate to delete constructive comments because you didn't like them any more than we should hold back on you playing the racial card for attention.<P>

Next we may hear of your husbands acceptance of what you did - and or continued to do in cucking him. You can't argue that you didn't have her cuck him - or can you. <P>

Deletion can be easier isn't it.<P>

You lose respect when you overly sensationalize - then you lose credibility when you delete comments on a subject that you initiated. How fair is that? Sure other writers have sympathy for you - with you - defend you but not many as it is for the wrong reason.<P>

Try to live with it and go on - if you can't then that is a discredit to yourself and your vanity.<P>

I think you are or can be better than that - can't you?

I have already addressed the subject of the deleted comments and will make no comments about it. You may accept my explanation or not - That choice is entirely up to you.

If you have quetions or problems understanding why certain decisions have been made about the plot of the story I would be more than happy to discuss them with you. My email address is in my profile for all to see. It may mean that you would have to come out from behind the "anonymous" tag, but it really is the best way to discuss things. I have always found that it is much more effective to ask someone a question directly than to just make assumptions on my own.

As for what you may next hear? There is only one way to find that out. If your outrage is such that you simply can't permit yourself to read further, the that is another choice that is entirely up to you.

I have to wonder what is really troubling to the readers who were commenting on the sexual liaison. What was the “literary failure” that deserves a zero rating? Is it the fact that in times of extreme stress and loss people might act in ways that they would not normally? Am I to conclude from the critic that this kind of scenario could not happen? I don’t believe that this is what I have read. Namely, on the critical artistic criterion of an artistic work – giving a credible picture of the world we live in: there were no complaints of the aspect I have brought to question. Rather I believe those were mostly, yet again, moralizing admonishing voices telling the author that behaviors of this kind should not be told, (I assume that it would have satisfied some had the wife and the Sergeant been caught and punished ). But this approach shows that those readers confuse fiction with ethical/ moral essays (philosophy department) or with religious texts. Fiction, at least at its best, was never narrowly moralizing and prescriptive. Its first goal is to crate a credible world of real characters and plot. Most humans (maybe except for the admonishing posters) do have weaknesses. The wife’s character and the Sergeant never went on a pursuit of a life style of orgies or a planned betrayal. If you read the story the circumstances explain (with no justifications) the context of their behavior. Part of a succeed fiction is making it credible on the deeper level of showing a three dimensional characters: including weakness. If you don’t get it, you are not looking for modern fiction as we know it, but rather, for morality tales (the term could be easily goggled). I am sure that those stories would be much more to your liking. <P>

Finally I dread to think about the possibility that an element of the resentment was related to the fact there was a narrative presenting sexual relations between two humans who happened to be of two different skin colors. I can’t read the mind of any one, but the question remains. Would we have the same level of “fussing”, if the partner to the liaison was white? How embarrassing. Would those be the comments of people who live in South Africa in The Apartheid age or of Americans today? <P>

No one can say that this kind of liaison could not have happened (even if it was quite unlikely as the anxious comments were quick to point out).<P>

Frankly, it has always been nauseating for me to witness thinly veiled resist comments. All that even after the horrific madness of Nazism and Fascism against which American went to fight. And revolting against interracial connections is different how? It is truly insane, and for sure eats at the core of the American psyche. For how long? It is a bitter irony to watch how the children of the people who turned others into slaves, have become, mentally speaking. into mental slaves themselves, as their capacity for being fully humans is so severely restricted.

While the action is deplorable that isn't what makes me set a 0. More it's the fact that this woman who in the last 7 chapters has been described as a very loving wife, all of a sudden and seemingly on a whim more or less decides to risk her future with her husband, the father of the child she's carrying.

She supposedly does this on the second visit from this sergeant.

Now as to the fact that the sergeant was black doesn't really change anything about the act itself in my opinion it just makes it less believable.

That a black man would go visit the wife of a white soldier who is overseas somewhere in the 1940s just seems very unlikely. If nothing else I don't doubt he knows he would catch hell from white soldiers and superiors when they found out.

Now of course it could happen and I guess it's up to each reader to decide how likely the scenario is. Personally I find the reasoning unbelievable and the actions very out of character for the wife. If the fuck had been a long deep kiss and hug instead it still would've been considered a scandal. Sure people don't act according to character all the time but but in my mind they are less likely to act out of character when it comes to life altering decisions.

You seem to have an agenda to put forth and historical content is not in that agenda. It lacks to much reality of what the times were like and the way the army worked then, that it made the story so bad from the start that all else was lost to me. You may delete my comment now.<p>PT

LM, I thopught it was a very good story, all the way. I was going to "get on you" about one or two of the historical inaccuracies (brother dieing in France in 1943 "action" - maybe he was in the OSS), but to me, who was a very actively imaginative teenager in those years and after "Boot Camp" reported to his NATTC (Naval Air Technical Training Center) in Norman, Oklahoma on VJ Day (Victory over Japan on Aug. 14, 1945) it was a very believable and heart-catching story. I wonder if any of your so-called critics are women and have experienced child birth in the loneliness that you so well described or the pain of separation from husband and family and the loss of their "only" support community because they share so deeply the fear of the "Black Creeper". I wonder if any one of them has suffered the loss of one whose safety they waited, hoped and prayed for, not just for days, weeks or months, but years.

No, LM, your story makes me wonder if you have a son or daughter in Iraq, and, if, perhaps, you write this story in memory of tales from your own mother and/or father about WW II, and seek to mitigate some of the pain of parental loneliness in the telling.

I, also, remember that "Strange Fruit" was written in 1943 or 1944 and caused a wave of hysteria to grip us in the "Deep South" and Southwest with fear of racial upheaval and change. That work of fiction, alone, gives my mind credance for the liason of your closing chapter.

Now I am off to read your other submissions. Thanks, again, for a "good story", well written.

I have read your story and I think you have done a pretty good job. It just needs to be finished. Just remember this is your story and the truth is what you want it to be, so don't others interfere with your writing.

Thanks to "Second Chances" I found your submission page and want to thank you for some of most touching stories I have read. Yes, you do take some poetic license with your descriptions of life in 1941, at least as experienced by many. But you tell a story wonderfully close to the heart and certainly got me thinking a lot about my parents (who lived through that war, both in and out of the Army).

If you ever pick up this story line again, I shall read it with great interest. But where you left it has a huge degree of truth; my aunt never really recovered from the telegram from the War Office "We regret to inform you..." and even those who did go on with their lives, well, it was never without regret and a sense of lose. One of my aunts flew fighter planes from the factory in California to the shipping area on the East Coast; he husband died in a B-17 somewhere over Germany. Yes she married again, had a couple of kids. But at family gatherings, you can still here the catch in her voice when the discussion gets around to WWII.

You captured so much of that emotional truth in your story. Thank you.

Constructively and talent aside - one wonders what your intent was.<P>

Clearly an attempt to sensationalize the cucking of a serviceman who couldn't defend himself from his closest friend and wife. <P>

To make the story as excitedly sordid as possible the current baby was a prop in the next room while mommy goes black trying for a mixed bastard child surprise for her loving husbands return.<P>

Given all that even in a pretty wrapper and bow of words well written did you really expect anyone who has been away serving their country to be entertained or aroused by your black cuck story?<P>

Puzzling that an intelligent woman would not consider that regardless of the cocks color that was used to sensationalize the cucking.<P>

When you write to impress you are what you do comes through to us on reflection of your message or intent.<P>

You can do better.

It's a great story. But it is far from over.

So as I started to read this I became interested right from the get go for a special reason. See I'm currently sitting in a hospital room caring for my beautiful wife who is now in a coma. The situation is different from your story but it intreaged me to here a story being told by a women in a coma. No I don't believe my wife has a story like this one she will be taking to her grave but hey we all have our closets and little Secrets I guess you could say. I had made a comment in the first chapter telling you I would explain later of what my interest was. My wife has another story she could talk about rather than an affair. For her it would be a story of date rape or drug rape. I say drug rape because there was no date. My wife and I have been together for almost 16 years. She is only 41 and well I am 60. It is currently the end of July 2019. She was diagnosed with cervical cancer in November of 2018 right after she turned 41. We together have been fighting this awful disease everyday sense she started treatments in January of 2019. As of July 28th 2019 she had been fighting a losing battle with a very serious infection that she has lost to. We made the decision to take all the meds and treatments off of her and turn her care over to hospice. She lays here now in a coma in a deep sleep as I just sit and hold her hand and wait.

So yes the way your story started out captured my attention right from the start.

Thank you for sharing.

Too bad this author never finished this series. At least not here. Great story of a tragedy in the making: infidelity while soldier husband overseas, and a mixed race bastard in the process. That fall-out would be epic. The sad thing is, this scenario probably played out at least a few times during that era.