All Comments on 'Contest: Alternate Chapter'

Nice and long too. Well done Angel. :)

Not normally my scene but loved how you intertwined revenge and romance into it.

Can't wait for Venus Desiring, please write faster!

after some investigation, I found it was a long story; certainly the longest one from this genre that I've ever read, and so I took a bite. Anyway, it has a great build-up with no let down what-so-ever. How you got Danielle to surrender from desiring revenge to romantic re-involvement is brilliant because the desire for revenge and romance are so intertwined.

I think the last paragraph sums everything up perfectly for me. What you wrote there, as far as I'm concerned, indicates that Danielle has matured from the experience of her willingness to trust. Suddenly, what once wasn't her cup-of-tea is now perfectly normal to her.

A great piece of writing as far as I can tell and 5 universes... oops!... I mean 5 stars.

I absolutely loved this one. Thank you.

I really liked your story you did good

This series actually took my breathe away. Thank you

This has to be the best scene you've written. I love your work. Thank you!

Bad. 1* bad.

and as a submissive i'd love to have lived it! thank you.

Loved this chapter so hot x

So glad you wrote this alternative ending. Most fulfilling chapter.

This, goldie, is the most perfect BDSM storie I have ever read. It just have it all and should have been in the “contest”, it had been a winner :-)

Thank you

In my mind there's a few more paragraphs before "I want to fuck you":

Danielle asks to do one more thing and leads Doug to the bathroom. She kneels in the shower and explains the joy she would get from fully satisfying her boyfriend's desires outweighs her disgust.