by hammertime
I enjoyed your story - good tempo very erotic and credible without being over the top - look forward to the next chapters
way too long, incohesive, yawn...I clicked off after 3 chapters. Don't quit your day job.
Excellent story. Beautifully written. She will be pregnant before her husband gets back if her father-in-law keeps fucking her multiple times every day. She may even have the baby before he gets back. Excellent!
This highly erotic story definitely needs a continuation. Perhaps Phil can keep fucking her and make a baby in her that will be born long before her husband returns off his 12-month assignment overseas, so that Phil and her can even begin a new baby for a sibling to the first one?
Your story was very erotic, and yes a bit long, but the story line called for it. Anything less would have been just another story, it set yours apart. I look forward to further submissions...you have fan
I wouldn't mind being a member of this family!! I'd gladly give my wife to them. Hell, if she was old enough, we might even enjoy some of the children, as the Parents and grandparents did!
A great story - more along the same lines - including the
F-I-L' brother and his wife and then daughter when she comes home from college - could get very interesting?????
There is a lot more to be written here. I can't wait to read it.
you have to bring this full circle bringing the whole family home and everyone getting pregnant yeah
I agree with anonymous - bring everyone together and get the women knocked-up.
Those black tow animals think they can write. Bah !!!
Of all your annoying errors, that's the most constant and avoidable one.
Also, you need to keep present or past tense the same in at least each sentence - paragraph really. Same goes for the singular / plural confusions. The sillyness ruins what could be some entertaining reads. You spoil your own moods. Such a waste. Bah!
That he can write?? Bah!! Those niggers can't even wipe their ass.
Look you fucking jack asses this was a good story you guys need to keep your mouth shut and how's that for grammar I spelt everything right. Black people can spell obviously because I spelt everthing right.How you like them apples I'm sure they taste sour. By the way if you call a black person a negro in a rude way don't be surprised when the slap the shit out of you. Fuck you, you punk ass bitch. I speak on the behalf of blacks around the world.
Great story. Country folks, incest... who teaches the generations? Really, when folks live out in the country and the closest neighbor is miles away, everyone learns from their parents, grandparents, siblings etc. Keep writing, loved the story, would like chapters on when the daughter returns home and with whom? Pregnancy or just fun?
plz continue this story, maybe a threesome with phil, paul and Jill and then amy and also a big orgy when Scott comes home
Your descriptions of the ranch ring true, which makes the story more realistic. I would like to hear about Phil's big cock entering Jill's pussy repeatedly until she gets bred. Scott probably wouldn't mind. And Ann would love watching her husbands cock do its business in Jill, maybe eat out a creampie!
Good story but it should've continued till at least past where the relatives visited if not when Scott got home.
Group sex should be on the tag. It's at the very least, interesting. I'm not usually into group sex, but can accept that, the weird grooming angle make me feel a little uneasy though.
Great story! It should've continued past the relatives visiting and particularly when Scott returned and a everyone had a steady diet of fuckfest every day and night! I'm sure the relatives would visit more frequently with Jill's regular participation!