All Comments on 'Cupid Has Lost My Address'

Awesome story! Prince Charles's birthday is 14 November- never thought about Her Maj and Prince Phillip celebrating Valentines Day!

I want to like this story. My biggest critique is that i cant tell who is talking. You just have the script but no actors. For the first page before they started talking about sex, i literally though the "male character" was talking to some other dude. I reccomend going back, looking at some examples of how and where to put in names amd who is speaking. It will really add to your story in the long run. I hope this helps and that i didnt come across as rude.

You mean they dropped them?!? (giggle)

I'll admit, I also thought it was two guys talking at first. But it was cleared up in the first 10% of the page. I didn't have any issues keeping track of which one was talking. I just had to switch in my mind that the dark haired guy was a dark haired gal. -- Jenny