All Comments on 'Dad My First Lover Pt. 01'

I enjoyed the situations and the thought processes. Exposition was somewhat choppy and their were typos so editing might be helpful. This helps you learn and grow.

xoxo,

Di

while I VOMIT!

Loved the story so far, hope you continue it.

Please write the 2nd chapter I thnk the story has potential

I like the gentle build up to the changing relationship. Don't keep us waiting too long to find what happens next!

I think this one has potential. I certainly would like to see where this story heads next.

I like your style of writing, plus ik like the way this is going. Keep it up

Good writing and nice characters, you write well and I find myself lost in the moment with them. please write more.