All Comments on 'Dan's Life'

I think he got the shaft, a vindictive D.A. no doubt. It was a good story, with a happy ending. Easy reading without the initial violence that got him in prison. I don't think there was any doubt to the outcome from the very first, though.

AS I said, easy to read and I enjoyed it!!

A really good read. Held my attention all the way through. I don't know how anyone can come up with so many quality stories and such a short span of time. I think this is one of your best. I know I've said it before but to many to choose from.

An avid reader and fellow writer

Kudo's to you

Once again you gave us a great story to enjoy, I look forward to reading stories by you. Your a talented writer and it shows, I am glad I've been lucky enough to enjoy the stories you've written for us here. Thanks

The hero must have had a lousy lawyer. Couldn't get pass the wife "voluntarily" testifying against the husband. There was enough holes in that legal case to prove "beyond a reasonable doubt." The wife didn't pay for her adultery, even worse, she sent him to jail for revenge, knowing he was innocent. Then conveniently the author kills the wife two years before he gets out of jail. We get no resolution for this part of the tale, so why even bother.

Good story DG but the legal case as YOU presented it was 100% crap.

first you cannot get a wife to voluntarily testify against a Hubby...

second the DA could not possibly PROVE that Hubby knew the boy friend AND Knew about an affair...

Given that murder 2nd degree is impossible in all 50 states

3rd there is no way he would get 15 years AND serve all 15... the idea that a Man with these circumstances in the early 21st century in the USA might serve a FULL sentance is fucking absurd.

he might get 15 years... he would NOT serve all 15... he would serve 1/3 of that

then once he knew his wife had MS and was dying would could of easy sought and been granted early parole

Well written and certainly a tear jerker. I do have a few small points which dropped the score though.

The linchpin holding your story together was the crime/trial/imprisonment. That being the case, you should have done a lot more research because it just doesn't hold together and I will confine my comments to this.

This guy would have never even been brought to trial, most likely. And the wife testifing? Totally wrong. Any 2nd year law student could could have put a stop to that. And with out that testamony (sic) and evident to show he DID know Allen and was aware of what was going on (which would have helped, not hindered his case BTW) the DA would have never received a conviction.

But having been convicted, I don't think the rest of the world would have been so welcoming. To them, he would have been a convicted killer and our society just isn't that forgiving, even when you are later exonerated. The sad fact is, once a killer, always a killer guilty or not.

And lastly, serve a full 16 years? No way. I don't know of many prisoners who serve their full time. Society just plain can't afford it like it or not. The prisions are just too full and the lines too long. If he drew 16, with good behavior, he might have served 6. If he drew Life, with parole, THEN he might have served 16.

This made me question some of the rest of the story. But, a very good story regardless.

Hey readers, give me a little bit of a break here. You're right, I'm not a lawyer and have no idea what the penalites are.

I just wrote a story hopefully for readers to enjoy. If me not knowing the legal system or contacting a lawyer ruined the story for you I'm sorry. You'll have to get over it or not read my stories. I write abot the legal system, cops, wielders, and many other professions that I know nothing about. I just have fun writing and give you my best. If it's not enough, again I'm sorry.

I guess if I wrote for a living and got paid for it, I would delve deeper into the occupations. Again thanks for reading my story and comments, even the negative ones.

DG Hear

Great story

The story stated he was sentenced to 20 years to life in the story and got out in 15 years 5 years earlier then expected.

Wives are allowed to testify against husbands and do daily. The defense would paint her as a vengeful woman out to cause as much pain and damage and accuses her of even lying to get back at her husband killing her boyfriend.

I could never be forgiving or sympathetic to such a wretched, spiteful and despicable person as this hate filled wife. She did everything she could to fuck him over continually; no matter how long they were married he’d have to hate this bitch and relish her ultimate demise. I think that’s how I’d personally feel, but I’ve never been there and have to let the story line feed my feelings, which a good story line does, make you feel the characters and surroundings and circumstances.

NONE of these things mean enough to change the great story line and writing.

This was great entertainment and wonderful scenario of Loving Wives, It is hard to find a new approach in cheating wives, and you came as close to different as anyone lately.

Thank you

With much respect

Sweet, romantic story. Forget about the comments about the legal stuff - I liked the story. It was obviously heartfelt. Thanks for a good read.

but a doggone good writer. I'm happy that you do not have indepth knowledge of the US legal system and crime and punishment. But PeggyTwitty must have read a different story than I read "20 to life"; "I got fifteen to life and now I'm out." My quote is a cut and paste from your story not figures I made up. Of course 15 to life would probably be 7-10. the only thing I did not understand is where the 5 years out early came from if he spent 15 in.

Appliance guys being required to be bonded, nah. The probation officer probably would not go for a sale job that is on the road and probably out of state.

The family reaction is everything you could hope for (being the convicted father); it is always nice to have a happy ending.

and I guess it is true you are no "John Grisham" and no "Elmore Leonard", I say to that "so what?!?".

Loved the story, you are a good writer, vastly improving and one of the more popular writers on this site.

Waiting anxiously for your next one

I thought you wrote a fine tale. As you say about the legal beagles 'so what'. The wife did not get off scott free - if you ever watched someone die of MS you would know the bitch wife got just what she deserved.

I certainly will take time to read more of your Tales

I love your stories. My problem is why do people who read fictional stories have to think things like the way the legal system works or any thing. I am not a lawyer or anything just a postal employee, so I don't know any thing about law, welding, computers, but I love the stories. When you are dissatisfied with a story let this miniscule stuff rest, and enjoy the story line as it was written. Remember it is fiction.Thank you for a great story. I laughed, cried and hed all the emotions of all good stories I read. Please keep them coming.

DG, for the romance portions of the story, you get top marks. You write romance as good if not better than anyone else I read faithfully.

But, there is one part of the story that really bothers me and that is Rita and the way that Thelma (and eventually the kids) react to her.

Usually, I don't let disputes about legal issues ruin my enjoyment of a story. Unless you are a lawyer or very familiar with the legal system, a misconception about legal issues will pass by most readers (the same way that medical or counseling issues will pass by most non doctors or therapists). It's a pervasive issue that you see not only in these stories, but also on TV, movies and mainstream literature.

So, based on this philosophy, I'm not going to comment on the mistaken identity and lack of contact issue. Nor am I going to comment on whether the wife would be allowed to testify or whether this would be second degree murder or manslaughter.

But there is one legal issue that strikes at the heart of the story. Particularly, the issue of exactly what Rita did to her husband. Because of this, I do feel the need to comment.

You have the husband attacking the guy because he honestly believes that he is saving his wife from rape. If he had been able to prove that to the jury, then in most, if not all states, this would have been considered a justifiable homicide. His belief doesn't have to be correct, it just has to be such that a reasonable person in his position would have made made the same decision. So, the question has to be asked, why didn't this happen. The reason you give is Rita's testimony.

My problem is that the story is relatively silent on what she said so I have to rely on my own experience to fill in the blanks. The only way her testimony could really hurt him is if Rita really stuck it to him and told the jury that he knew about the affair and knew he was killing her lover.

If all she did was tell what happened, then she would be supporting his story. If she did not dispute his statement that he knew nothing about the affair then there is no evidence to contradict his story that he was protecting her and he has a legitimate case of justifiable homicide (even if his belief was ultimately wrong). But if she tells the police and the jury that he knew about the affair and that he knew that he was killing her lover, then his theory of defending her is out the window and he is screwed.

In other words, my experience tells me that the only weay this story makes sense in real world terms is if Rita portrays him in the worst possible light and goes out of her way to screw him over and send him to jail.

Now, the problem that this creates is the way that Thelma and the kids treate Rita. Her behavior had to be so egregious that it would have almost forced Thelma and the kids to make a choice: the husband or Rita. It's not just a case where the husband/daddy went to jail because he killed the wife/mommy's lover, its a case where wife/mommy caused him to go to jail because she lied to the police.

How can Thelma and the kids accept him back with open arms while still saying that they loved her (even though they did not like what she did)? How can Thelma who claims to have a long term love for the husband accept or help in any way shape or form the sister who betrayed the man she loves and sent him to jail by her lies? How come Thelma never told the kids exactly what happened so they could confront her?

On the flip side of the coin, if the husband spend 10 plus years in jail, wouldn't he come out pretty bitter? Would be be able to accept Thelma's story so easily? Would he be able to accept the fact that she was a collaborator by hiding the truth from the kids? Would he forgive her for never going to see him or trying to sneak the kids in to see him? This affects my ability to accept the story.

Well this comment is almost getting as long as the story. I liked the story, but my problems with Rita prevent me from giving it full marks.

Enough of my raving. Can't wait for the next one.

DG, for the romance portions of the story, you get top marks. You write romance as good if not better than anyone else I read faithfully.

But, there is one part of the story that really bothers me and that is Rita and the way that Thelma (and eventually the kids) react to her.

Usually, I don't let disputes about legal issues ruin my enjoyment of a story. Unless you are a lawyer or very familiar with the legal system, a misconception about legal issues will pass by most readers (the same way that medical or counseling issues will pass by most non doctors or therapists). It's a pervasive issue that you see not only in these stories, but also on TV, movies and mainstream literature.

So, based on this philosophy, I'm not going to comment on the mistaken identity and lack of contact issue. Nor am I going to comment on whether the wife would be allowed to testify or whether this would be second degree murder or manslaughter.

But there is one legal issue that strikes at the heart of the story. Particularly, the issue of exactly what Rita did to her husband. Because of this, I do feel the need to comment.

You have the husband attacking the guy because he honestly believes that he is saving his wife from rape. If he had been able to prove that to the jury, then in most, if not all states, this would have been considered a justifiable homicide. His belief doesn't have to be correct, it just has to be such that a reasonable person in his position would have made made the same decision. So, the question has to be asked, why didn't this happen. The reason you give is Rita's testimony.

My problem is that the story is relatively silent on what she said so I have to rely on my own experience to fill in the blanks. The only way her testimony could really hurt him is if Rita really stuck it to him and told the jury that he knew about the affair and knew he was killing her lover.

If all she did was tell what happened, then she would be supporting his story. If she did not dispute his statement that he knew nothing about the affair then there is no evidence to contradict his story that he was protecting her and he has a legitimate case of justifiable homicide (even if his belief was ultimately wrong). But if she tells the police and the jury that he knew about the affair and that he knew that he was killing her lover, then his theory of defending her is out the window and he is screwed.

In other words, my experience tells me that the only weay this story makes sense in real world terms is if Rita portrays him in the worst possible light and goes out of her way to screw him over and send him to jail.

Now, the problem that this creates is the way that Thelma and the kids treate Rita. Her behavior had to be so egregious that it would have almost forced Thelma and the kids to make a choice: the husband or Rita. It's not just a case where the husband/daddy went to jail because he killed the wife/mommy's lover, its a case where wife/mommy caused him to go to jail because she lied to the police.

How can Thelma and the kids accept him back with open arms while still saying that they loved her (even though they did not like what she did)? How can Thelma who claims to have a long term love for the husband accept or help in any way shape or form the sister who betrayed the man she loves and sent him to jail by her lies? How come Thelma never told the kids exactly what happened so they could confront her?

On the flip side of the coin, if the husband spend 10 plus years in jail, wouldn't he come out pretty bitter? Would be be able to accept Thelma's story so easily? Would he be able to accept the fact that she was a collaborator by hiding the truth from the kids? Would he forgive her for never going to see him or trying to sneak the kids in to see him? This affects my ability to accept the story.

Well this comment is almost getting as long as the story. I liked the story, but my problems with Rita prevent me from giving it full marks.

Enough of my raving. Can't wait for the next one.

Well DG, once again you gave us a great story to enjoy, one that brought tears to my eyes and held my attention all the way through. What characters! The heroic Dan sent to prison for defending his loved ones. Children (and grandchildren) who love him without reservation. And the beautiful Thelma who loved him and loved him and loved him! As for Rita, she was infatuated with Allen and planned a future with him. When Dan killed ‘true love’ Allen, all her dreams were shattered so one can understand her vindictive testimony at the trial even if one cannot condone it. As for Rita not paying for her sins, to die from MS is price enough, ask anyone who has had a friend or loved one suffer so. DG another great tale of love with such a warm and happy ending. Bravo! Pete.

you must understand that when we say a story is a "good story", we go by different meanings:

to you and others --- or any one --- who don't have the detail knowledge of SOMETHING, you focus on some other things you like. you gloss over issues you think minor or not important to the story

but to some readers, because perhaps they have detail knowledge of some of THOSE issues mentioned in the story, they take issue with HOW the author deals with them; the author may very think he/she only alluded to such issues as mere, broad background to make the story more interesting; but to those with knowledge, those "issues" the author alluded to have importance.

when DG Hear talks about incarceration --- specically in terms of how many years a person actually serve [with "good behavior," etc. included, of course: which is the case for this individual/protagonist here in this story] --- all we are saying is, he owes it to ALL of his readership to at least review some literature on the subject, and find out how long, on average, a person would serve a given sentence.

good fiction, contrary to some popular opinions, is not to "stretch the imagination", no! instead, it is to explain to the readers how normally unbelievable things are done! the underlined word is "EXPLAIN": that means you give detailed reasoning (even if fictional!), how you get from point A to point Z!

anyway, per the story: i think someone else noted this: for DG Hear to kill off that woman who cost Dan some 15 years of his life, two years before he got out, that was a CHEAP way out!~

to satisfy some of us who lust for blood, not just crude sex and an abundance of it, the author shouldn't have killed her off like that.

and MS?, come on, author! this is FICTION, as if you've already forgotten! i mean, if she's fucking around like a rabbit like that, the chances --- in real life, that is! --- of her contracting a vicious disease and dying from it is better than her having inheriting MS (or having inherited factors which more easily predisposed her to getting MS) and dying from the latter

for some of us masochistic readers, the author should'f made her only semi-paralyzed from her sexual diseases and live out a long life, knowing that her sister is now the wife of a man like Dan, a man who kills to protect those he loves, a man who would do long prison terms and not complain, because he will die to protect his loved ones. have her watch him and her younger sister live out a life of decency, of compassion, of understanding,,,, have her see them giving birth to their baby and how they adore their family, including the two grown children whom she tried uncessfully to turn against the man whom killed what he thought was vicious rapists in his own bed,,,

THAT would satisfy some of our blood lustinesss, DH Hear! why did you take the easy way out, you sill author! ;o)

sadness heart break and a great happy ending. I liked it

i don't think there was or is enough evidence to prosecute the husband. The DA has to prove without a shadow of a doubt that he knew about the affair, and since he didn't have a clue about it, i seriously doubt that there is any or enough evidence to support that he did know. I know the wife testified against him, but even then there is no proof that he knew of the affair. All you have is the wife testimony and that to me is not enough. If i would have been a juror, i would have had and have SERIOUS doubt that the husband knew about the affair since all the DA had nothing. Sure the wife testified that he did know and thats why she killed her lover, but where it the proof.

The DA dosen't have a shred of evidence. Yes the wife testified, but any good lawyer would have painted her as a lie and a cheat who lied because she wanted revege on her husband for killing her lover. Hell, i am sure that dan had witnesses, those people that he had conducted buissness with that evening. I have to agree with the comment below, if i was a juror i wouldn't have voted guilty. Anyways, it was a great story as always and i can't wait for your next one.

Love this story.....pls don't take the negative feedback from a few ppl to hard, some have nothing better to do than bitch lol

Loved the plot & your characters.....Keep up the wonderful writing :)

I LIKED this story! I'm not an officer of the court, so the legal stuff (with the exception of the woefully incompetent defense attorney; where's Melvin Belli when you need him?)didn't get my briefs in a bunch. BUT, I do think a bit like this would have helped: While Rita lay dying from MS, she called her children and sister near and asked for forgiveness for what she did to Dan. In turn they each said, "I love you for being my Mom/Sister, but there is no way I can forgive you for destroying an innocent man (remember, they all think Dan is dead). Maybe the Good Lord can, but I can't." Then you could have mentioned that Rita then cursed them all and died. I couldn't see any that evil being TOO penitent. Just my .02 cents! Keep writin' and I'll keep reading!

I LIKED this story! I'm not an officer of the court, so the legal stuff (with the exception of the woefully incompetent defense attorney; where's Melvin Belli when you need him?)didn't get my briefs in a bunch. BUT, I do think a bit like this would have helped: While Rita lay dying from MS, she called her children and sister near and asked for forgiveness for what she did to Dan. In turn they each said, "I love you for being my Mom/Sister, but there is no way I can forgive you for destroying an innocent man (remember, they all think Dan is dead). Maybe the Good Lord can, but I can't." Then you could have mentioned that Rita then cursed them all and died. I couldn't see any that evil being TOO penitent. Just my .02 cents! Keep writin' and I'll keep reading!

I like all of your stories. This is one of the best.Thank you for sharing this with us

Great Story and Moving it had me laughing and pissed at the dumb wife for cheating on Danni like she did but he has everything he wanted in his life.

Atlanta,Ga

I still loved this story this is the second time reading this story i cried some reading where Danny meets his kids and meeting his grand kids after 15 yrs from being in prison .

Atlanta,Ga

But! I have one problem with this? Why in the Hell would anybody want children pushing fifty, seeing how he/she have a Great family as it is. He'll be pushing 70, if he makes it, by the time the kid leaves the house. I would think that they would just enjoy each other and the family, that they have, and let his, and hers, seeing how that Thelma raised them, kids make the babies

I finally got around to reading this. Good story as usual.

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A story like this makes for great LW reading, a wonderful easy to follow story with a great ending.

and the circle stays unbroken. TK U MLJ LV NV

Thanks fo sharing.

GOOD READ!!

with their nitpicking criticisms of a great story by a great storyteller? I enjoyed it, and I'll be the first to say that I couldn't have written it as well as you did.

It's my personal belief that a lot of our readers are jealous of your ability to hold our interest with your stories, despite the fact that you always seem to make everything come out happy at the end.

I enjoy your stories so much that I try to ration them, not over three or four a week.

Don't let the criticisms slow you down, please. I just hope there's always another DGH story waiting there for me.

This is the first of your stories I've read. Thank you. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

In terms of the legal arguments here, a wife can testify against a husband in a criminal trial. She just can't testify to anything he says. But she can tell what she witnesses him doing, or what she tells him. So if she said he suspected about the affair, then that is ok. Testifying about the attack. Ok again. And when someone is killed the DAs do want someone to pay for that, so hearing him say he thought she was being raped and her saying he killed my lover, most people would believe her.

As always, DG, your work is exceptional. Thank you for writing. Lamar

Wife really screwed him over, and sent him up the river. To bad the bitch never really paid other than the disease that court up with her later in her life.

With a likeable anti-hero -he paid way too much for what happened - he should have never been tried forget convicted - but it happens - and probably too often.

The ending worked extremely well - thanks -

The writing style was a bit stilted in parts and the editor needs to watch for proper grammar a bit more - but hey it is a donated service and we all appreciate it - I know if I ever get to writing something myself i will be desperate for an editor heh.

I think they would need more proof than the wife's say-so that he knew the victim was her lover. Given that she was cheating on him and was planning on divorcing him makes her less than an unbiased witness.

And I have no sympathy for her disease, frankly I wish it had been something more painful than MS.

And think it to be believable? You write as if you have never experienced real life, or still live in 1950. No court would have believed the wife's testimony, seeing as she was the one cheating, and was obviously trying to convict her husband. Courts require EVIDENCE! Proof that he knew about the affair-none presented. Proof that he knew the victim-none presented. You wrote; "How do you proof that you don't know someone". You don't have to! The burden of proof is on the prosecution to prove THEIR case. You ever hear of 'Innocent until proven guilty'. That means that you don't need to prove your innocence, it means THEY must prove your guilt, beyond doubt.

Do you ever get out, and meet people? Nobody acts like you write them, unless you personally know Mother Theresa! His wife cheats on him, caused him to mistakenly take a life, intentionally gets him convicted and imprisoned for 15 years, takes his house, all his money, his kids, tries to turn them against him, prevents him from ever seeing them, causing him to miss all of their formative years, and for them to then think he is dead, and tells everyone that he is a murderer; and you write him as just shrugging his shoulders, and saying; " She was my wife for ten years, and the mother of my kids, so I can't hate her". What fucking planet do you live on? Do people walk up to you and smack you in the face, only for you to apoligise for hurting their hand? Enough of this 'forgiveness is the only way, turn the other cheek, Praise the Lord!' crap you usually write. Try to write at least ONE story with even a smidgen of realism in it, just once for kicks.

I read this once before, I don't remember if I commented or not. Thank you for writing this and your other good stories.

although it was a well told story it was based on poor facts. I don't see how he could have been convicted under the circumstances which makes the story kind of an oxymoron or some such miss truth.

I know it was needed for the story, but I also don't believe that his ex-wife's testimony would have been enough to convict him, given her admitted bias.

This one, and I take back my previous comment, because this time, I wasn't in a bad mood when I read it, and found myself enjoying it for what it was. It may not have been the most believable story ever, but it was a nice redemption story all the same.

All too many of the stories in here are heart breakers one way or another. It was a pleasure to read one that was actually uplifting and positive. I wasn't certain I had read anything else you'd written so I checked and found you in my "Favorite author" file.

Aside from some (to me at least) obvious telegraphing of the story line in the first few paragraphs, I enjoyed following the ups and downs of Dan's life. I shouldn't complain, I can't write a coherent story even without telegraphing, and I 'll never write to this high standard.

Any of the commenters who feel that Dan wouldn't have been convicted in a 'REAL" court have apparently never been involved with our system of "justice". There are an awful lot of prisoners convicted on much less and equally flawed evidence residing in our "correctional facilities", some guilty and some not-so-guilty.

Thanks for not dwelling on his prison time.

I almost wish you'd dealt with Rita less compassionately, but you handled her quite well. And having Thelma keep the kids from getting bent was a masterful touch. Keeping the trust factor in a family exposed to a mother's shenanigans is a difficult task, and in this hypothetical case you handled it nicely.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

Having served 2 years in a Correctional Institute, I noticed a couple of things that were different from my stay. Nothing all that important to your story. All felons in my state must report to their parole/probation officer within 72 hours of his release from confinement. I was glad to see that things worked out for Danny. There are two types of men in prison...criminals and inmates. Criminals are hardened and know no other way of life but crime. They lack a conscience. They see nothing wrong with their criminal activity. They have a hard, if not impossible, time blending back into society. An inmate is someone who has, due to poor judgment, emotions or circumstances, committed a crime. They seek forgiveness and the right to prove they have a place in society. Danny found his place. I am still seeking mine. Great story.

and when you shake a tree no one knows what may come out, TK U MLJ LV NV

You're use of seen is not correct . Use saw or have seen.

glad he got his life together and his family back....hit ex wife was a cheating whore....who paid the price for it....glad he got a good job and a new loving wife...

wonderful story keep writing

The story's good in a fairy-tale kind of way but...and it's only me...but I think that being in prison for all those years, he'd have been thinking about what his wife did to him. I think he would have become bitter, resentful, angry and hateful. Those feelings would have developed because he would have been challenged a lot in his early years in prison and would have had to defend himself a lot. He would have become hardened. His speech, attitude and conversations are too congenial when he gets out and don't reflect a man who has spent all those years in prison! Otherwise it's just a fairy-tale!

Lemonade after a violent start. No story at all, some sort of Penelope tale that would not even make a good melodrama since there in nothing in it, no plot.

It's, of course, a feel good story. The wife was punished and the good guy made out in the end after suffering unjustly. Fairy tailish, yes. A very good tale, yes!

"Multiple Sclerosis, a horrible muscle disease. They were only giving her a few years".

I only got that far, I have MS, have had it for over 25 years, it is NOT a muscle disease, it is a neurological degenerative disease that affects the nerve lining in the brain and spinal cord, which then gives other symptoms, and to the comment about 'contracting it' with all the cheating she was doing, you don't 'contract' it from another person like an STD, I was 12 when I had my first symptom so hardly a fucking STD, if she only had a few years, its a serious type (there is 5 types) of MS and she wouldn't be speaking on her death bed you fucking idiot, she wouldn't be able to and MS is TREATABLE!!!!!!!!.

I have seen a few writers use MS this way, if you're going to write something in your story GET THE FUCKING FACTS RIGHT!!!!! 1* for the asshole author.

I would have let the wife live until two weeks after his release, so that she could see him resuming his life while she had to die. That would have been a greater punishment for her.

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Decent story,though I would liked the ex wife to suffer some form of punishment.

I know MS is tough, but she would have had it either way. She was downright evil and deserved more of a punishment. She got to raise he kids who sill loved her WTF while he was stuck in prison cause she lied. Although it was a good ending, his ex should have hated by her kids or something. Still OK story.

The first wife was a liar and a cheater. Why do these two @qualities@ go together so often, actually almost always? Her punishment is and will never be enough; after all, she sent him to prison and deprived him of the pleasure of knowing his kids. By the way, MS is NOT a punishment for bad behavior; it is a health condition not related to sex activities or flaws in one's bad decision making process! The wife is creating hate and resentment in the reader's mind. It is obvious that his kids have inherited their quality from HIM, not her. The pregnancy of the new wife certainly is a welcome ending.

I have enjoyed this writing, hence the 5 stars rating.

BJ

What a great story. 5 stars

Loved this story, but the first wife….

The best revenge, living a good life. 5 stars.

Love the story. AAAAAA++++++

What a wonderful story. Had the water works turned on a couple of times when the grandkids got involved. Well worth all five stars.

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Beautiful story beautifully written!

11/10!!!!!

Always glad to read your stories!

5

loved Thelma and hated Rita. 5 Stars Beautiful Story.

Enjoyed the story. Interesting plot. Afosi2604...

yes thelma

Excellent story, 2nd time reading, not sure why but first time I only gave it a 4, for the life of me I don’t know why I did that as it’s a 5 star story all the way. Don’t worry it’s now ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Not a bad tale. Enjoyed it.

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One BIG plot hole surrounding his reported death: although Thelma was told of his death 8 years into his prison sentence so she stopped writing — why the hell did he stop writing HER? And wouldn’t one of the first things he would do after being transferred would be to notify Thelma of his new address?!!! And related to this — so he never communicated with his brother after the brother moved to Florida?

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And while karma caught up with Rita, it was a bummer that Dan didn’t get to enjoy it 🤗

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4 ****

secand time very good