All Comments on 'Dark Weres Ch. 10'

There are spelling and grammatical errors throughout, more so than normal for you. It gets to the point where I as a reader need to detach and try and figure out what is supposed to be there. "mars" instead of "arms" would be one instance.

You have a great story line going on and I have read every story however I have to agree the grammatical errors take away from the story, at times to the point where I have to stop to try to figure out a word / point of view and the story loses it flow. Would love to edit a chapter for you, putting my money where my mouth is so to speak! Not that I am an official editor of any capacity

I love your work but this chapter had way more errors then usual.

I really enjoyed watching Alphonso change through the chapters as he met with his grandson's progressive pack and his sons found their mates, all the while becoming increasingly aware of his own mortality. When he does eventually die his heart will be lighter, knowing that he has seen his pack start in a positive direction. I think that's really the type of legacy we would all like to leave our families.

Please, please get a new editor and read your work before submitting. The number of errors on the first page alone is astounding.