All Comments on 'Darla's Games Day 01'

I read a lot of stories and this is one of the hottest in a long time. You have a wonderful style. I love that you manage to play out domination along side sensual romance. Amazing!

Some parts were good but the entire story was too long. Break it up into Chapters and develop each erotic topic in it's chapter.

Hot i cant wait for the next chapter

Thanks for the positive, I understand the negative. This story isn't going to be for everyone. It's more like a book than most things I have read on here. So, if character development and sidetracks into completely non-sexual content disappoint you, you probably shouldn't waste your time on my stuff. There are very juicy parts and later chapters will probably lose alot of the 'vanilla' content as the characters are established, particularly Carrie. I think the payoff is worth the effort, but again, I'm the author. (jessicasubs@yahoo)

Loved it . Love the your writing style. As you said their is millions of short stories. Honestly the only rating you should be worried about is what you think of it. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to reading more of it.

This isn't quite my kind of story, but I accept the parameters as is and move on. From the first day's installment, I say that Carrie is a fool and that the other girls, despite their infrequent lapses into softness, are quite mean.

However, panthergirl, I like your writing style. You have a vivid imagination, and the story moves along quite well. I do hope this isn't a tragedy and that Carrie, as the supposed heroine, finds a way to summon up the inner strength to get past these cruel women and their f*d-up games. (This includes the original three women, Lisa, Karissa, and that devil, Jessica.) I really look forward to the next chapter.

An interesting premise! At times I feel the story is stretching the limits, pushing past my suspension of disbelief that any character would allow these things, but I have to remind myself that this IS a fantasy. And, on top of that, clearly a very hot and interesting one. I find a lot of domination/submission stories to be so cut and dry, and even stereotypical, that I just can't find myself getting into it very easily (no offense to those who like them!). However, your story has definitely piqued my interest.

I especially appreciate how you write the protagonist. Her innocence and naiveté make her a much more appealing, interesting character than a run-of-the-mill "Yes master, whatever you say master" submissive.

I'm looking forward to reading the additional chapters already posted to see where you've taken this. Thanks for sharing your work!

Best story I've ever read on this site and have been here for some years, seriously very very impressive. Thank you!

Oops I read this without looking at what category it was in. Now i feel a little depressed with an imaginary kill list. But im still hooked

I found you through the top stories of a category and a really glad I did. I relish the knowledge this is many chapters ahead. You are got, as I a hope we will find Carrie turning that way, too. Keep writing like this.

But I don't care, this is a hot story. And I hope the other chapters are just as exciting to read.

Can U get. Little bit of living in reality?

Spare us the mislabeled Social Darwinism...

"You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means."

Inigo Montoya.

Panthergirl, nice quote!

I quit partway through. There’s nothing realistic about this at all and going by the chapter headings it looks like a string of kink loosely tied together with random bullshit.

The only realistic part was the college girls cutting up her clothes and dumping her in a weird out of the way Bar/club.

I've read most of the comments thus far. Panthergirl, I'm glad you aren't letting the fools discourage you - at least visibly. This is not a tale for the action-only reader. The writing is solid with lots of meat. It is not for everyone but for those who can appreciate a decent erotic story - you're in for a treat. No, it is not perfect - what is? What we are seeing in these pages is a talented young writer sharing her best stuff - at this time. She is only going to get better if she keeps it up. (no pun intended.)

PG, I'll offer the rest of my comments privately.

Art

Call me weird, but I like my erotica to have a story and compelling characters. This is exactly what this story offers.

An instant favourite of mine.

Thank you, Panthergirl!

I like it. No sex at all really but the strong storyline more than makes up for it. Great job.

"A cornered rat will bite the cat". It's the first rule you should always keep in mind when using leverage on someone. You can't go straight for the jugular - you need to slowly erode their boundaries bit by bit. Adapting to their new situation before being pushed even further. Learning helplessness. Being reluctant to break free after costs have been sunk. Darla moves way too fast.

Read all parts and also the follow-up series, awesome! At chapter 10 I almost quit because it got... rough. But then I went on and loved the bits after.

Has anyone found any stories similar to the quality of this? NOT looking for stories where the main character is only named c**t or similar or where it's only going from bad to worse.