by Brian6588
....was a bit of proof reading to catch the spelling errors and grammatical typos. Otherwise an excellent storyline executed interestingly.
Garter 'built'?? Shouldn't that be 'belt'??
Do you bother to Proof Read??
Stupid. Spelling errors are a big turn off. So is lack of a dictionary. Body physic?
I'll give you five stars if you promise never to write again, or at least but your work in the bondage and torture section.
All these commenters getting so nasty with a few errors in spelling, etc.. This
world is going to hell in a hand basket. Great story, Brian.....
Liked it I’m 65 and I love playing with women about 27 yrs old i still can’t believe some women like this grandad
Yes a proof reader to catch the spelling errors would be a plus. However spelling is more an aptitude than a skill. Reach out to me if you ever want a proofreader. Your writing skill is worthy of a bit of time before publishing here.
The story is skillfully crafted and believable in addition to being erotic. The flow is natural and it is so clear that the characters are very glad to be together. The epilogue portion confirms this and indicates that this was just a beginning to a lovely future.