All Comments on 'Death Brings Déjà Vu Ch. 01'

The story is very good, but it needs to be followed and I would like to see Liz and Bert to get together permanently.

Just pure literature masterpiece! Better than the bestest. Keep it up MM!

Fantastic story, just as good as you others. I can't wait to read what happens next. I would really like to see Bath and Bert together forever exclusively. 5 starts like all you other stories. Thank you

More please.

Very good can't wait for more!

So often in stories of this type the discovery of multi-generational incest appears to be unreal. I greatly appreciate the way that you have set this up; it seems that Beth and Bert are just being true to a familial standard.

However, you do need some editorial assistance, especially where pronouns appear that should, by context, have been indefinite articles or conjunctions These distractions interrupt the smooth flow of your story.

As with the other commentators, I look forward to the next part of the story.

The sex scene in the elevator was genius. Sensory deprivation sex with Bert who has a phobia... Very nice. Give us more. 5*!

Thanks for this. I'm thinking to follow the family lines a nice flow chart would be helpful. I have no santa claus wishes about the next chapter but to wish people wouldn't post a list of I wants. A little bit of editing and this would be better than it is, which is already 5 stars.Thanks again!

A very neat story situation, and very interesting - and that's the one problem. It's interesting. I got so wrapped up in the family history, that the sex became a bit of a distraction. And it was a rather long story - I had to break for dinner. All that took off a star. I used to know someone from Pilot, VA. Never went there, but that added a touch of interest. She seemed kind of laid back, like someone who would not have greatly disapproved of these goings on.

It is really getting interesting about now.... who gets who? This one sounds like Deja Vu all over again!

Moooorrrreeee

didnt like the cheating on the bed ridden spouse.

I loved the first two-thirds of this story but then the family history became over-elaborate and distracting...would have been better to have concluded this part with a less dramatic reading and a menage-a-trois(Amber, Beth & Bert) in the elevator. Nevertheless I look forward to reading about Beth's visit to California. Thank you!

Thanks for all the feedback and comments. This story was written long before the Empty Nesters and Unintended Consequences. We struggled with the cheating aspects of this and the reality that bad stuff happens. We will likely continue work on the other two story lines and an upcoming release before continuing with this one.

I cannot wait for the next chapter !! It is so different and arousing and brings many elements in but melds them together in a great way.

Hopefully, John and Amber will hook-up again with Bert and Lizzie. As for Bert's wife; that seems like she is out of the loop entirely and how that comes to pass is another area. If Lizzie stays with Bert and his wife; maybe that situation will become the same as Bert and Lizzie ??? Thanks.

Having moments in life that cause you to look back at past moments of the same things make you really think about life itself.

Just wow. Even the cheating aspect was acceptable because of the deep feeling between the siblings. Not too fond of the Amber threesome angle, but all in all an excellent tale.

Don't apologize for the cheating MM, you warned them at the beginning. The story was HOT! I'd like to read more. Definitely as good as your other stories.

ruined the whole story..........and ANY respect for the perverts!

...this has been a strong start to a much larger story of comp;ex potential. Family secrets effect down the generations. Coming to terms with past unknowns and present confusion lead to future crises and unforeseeable consequences.

The brain-repairing nano-tech mentioned early in this story, unfortunately will be marketed as 'The Cure-all" for diseases such as brain cancer, destructive senility such as Alzheimer's or physical injuries to brain tissue such as accidents and sports.

However, not even discussing the possibility of any of the hypothesized variations of supernatural soul or non-corporeal spirit or reincarnation of persona. What we do know is that memory is a chemical chain in 3 dimensions. Maybe 4 if there is a quantum effect, which I suspect.

Even if the brain cells are repaired or replaced by nanonite therapy. That CANNOT repair or replace the destroyed data or eroded information. The discharged patient who walks out of the hospital will most definitely not be the person who had checked in.

I foresee a multitude of lawsuits claiming fraud and medical malpractice, By You...because You did not get back the person who had been your Momma or your Husband or whomever you were expecting to be restored.

That personality is not erased but rather will have been destroyed by time the physical body has recovered and is beginning therapy learning to adapt to a new life. Not a 're-newed' life Sorry, ain't possible, ain't going to happen.

I'm not even sure a genetic test on the entire family would provide answers. Once you start stirring the batter blends pretty fast. At best, you would learn they are all related to each other, but in differing amounts.

oh well

btw, my Escape doesn't have a trunk.

I really liked it. I thought it was well developed and in many ways, had some fascinating twists. Want More!

We've have made more corrections and very minor tweaks. We are trying to put some time into fixing the continuation.

I found this to be an engaging story with interesting characters, and I await the continuation of the tale.

A great story but what an arsehole.He's got a pregnant wife at home who is clearly having a tough time and he fucks two women.I had a friend who had a relationship while his lovely wife was pregnant and my wife and I had to pick up the pieces after the other women told her.I would not do that to my boss and I fucking hate him.How could anyone do that to someone they love.Sorry don't understand but it was hot.wife did not like this story but I guess I know why and it's nothing to do with the talented authors ability.

Can't wait to hear the rest of the story :-)

Only thing I hated about it was Amber having sex with them.

Please, please write the next installment soon, this really is a very good story.

I really do need to know what happens next !

This is another of MindsMirror's very good stories. I'm looking forward to the next instalment of Bert and Liz's relationship.

Thought it was a very good story and I'm waiting for the next chapter.

Really good read - please do continue this....

Five Stars!

I really enjoyed this, I'm so looking forward to the next installment.

Good to see you are working on more to the Page story as well.

2017 can't get here soon enough !

This story was great, a sequel would be perfect.

It's been 20 months since this story appeared, you say at the end there is more to come.

Is that still your intention ?

I really hope there will be more, they are a nice couple and this a gentle story.

Maybe move Beth to California and have the three of them set up one extended home 'together' !

Please let us know one way or the other your intention with this story - to continue with it or not ?

Regards,

Rapier

If I had read this first, I wouldn't have bothered with any of your other stories.

Hated the idiot savant angle, hated Beth's constant mood swings, hated the family rape backstory and especially hated the "it's not our fault, we're inbred" excuse...

The writing itself is good, and the sex scenes are ok, if not particularly stimulating, although I would have avoided the messy anal in the elevator... Seemed to serve no purpose and suspends a bit of disbelief, if Bert noticed it but the rescuers didn't

Someone, somewhere, has been VERY Productive a few years back.

What with all the Familiar looking women who may or may not be some form of not so distant relative now.

Still though, Looking forward to them working out they're cousins somehow and not Full blooded siblings.

For the most part, I enjoyed this, The elevator was great except for the Anal as that had no way to Vent out and the workers WOULD have made a comment on it.

Please don't stop there

the shower scene was very hot + shows experience...what with the anal queefs and all...

a LOT of coupling...

could have done without the elevator scene- and, unless they're always-prepared boy scout types carrying lube ...anal without lube about impossible...

would really enjoy seeing the second chapter...

5 and going to fave too...

More please. I love the way you write.

Second time of reading and its still a great story. Would really like to read the next part so please do continue this.

Great story all around! It wasnt hurried, there was tons of exposition that developed the characters,. There was an underlying story that bolstered the sex scenes. Drama, passion and an issue to be resolved. Also, your story was based on a realistic chance happening. This is IMO, one of the too 5 stories I've read so far on Lit. I definitely hope you continue this great writing. 5 stars!

I've been on this website reading, reading, reading for about a year now. This is only the 2nd story I've read written by this Author- 'MindsMirror'.

Quixotic Rapprochement was the 1st (F'ing Awesome!) I usually HATE long stories on Literotica. After reading Quixotic R. I realized WHY----> because usually, it's difficult to get through 14 pages of suck-ass, poorly written dialogue, description, plot, etc. I had NO PROBLEM spending time reading Quixotic R. in fact if it had been 100 pages I would have been happy. Anyway, I digress.

After reading page one of Death Brings Déjà Vu I smiled to myself. "This writer is Myer-Briggs aware and has created an INTP personality-type doctor!" Page 2 nailed it even further. Now THAT'S an intelligent thought process to go to that extent in fleshing out a character. I would be willing to venture that the author themself is, in fact, Meyer-Briggs INTP a rare (3%) personality type: Research scientist, absent minded professor, brilliance, VERY specific in their language and dialogue (you would have a very difficult time lying to an INTP) alot of internal dialogue pretty much lives inside their own heads most of the time, does NOT care about social status or popularity, VERY chosey about who they let into their lives, preference to stay in rather than go out, not interested in small talk, people drain them, quiet reflection and solitude power them up, the logician who is neither led nor wants to lead...dances to their own drummer. I know you. Introvert/Intuitive/Thinker/Perceiver- INTP

You are my favorite author. I am so happy I have so much more to explore and read by this author. FUCK YEAH!

... that you should finish this fine story!

5 Stars, and thanks.

Once again you have not failed to make it seem as though romance is in the heir!

I have really enjoyed twists and turns. There must be something in the water down there.

A good story, but here it is over FIVE YEARS LATER and you haven't finished it!

I see you still visit this site so like other people I'll ask you to finish this story

A great story. Please finish it. I want them to get together. Trina die in childbirth, and Beth divorces Tony. Then they can be together.

It is your universe so you can do it no problems.

Please finish the damned story.

5/5

MORE!

... also, Wednesday, not Friday? WTF?

We aren't sure what the comment means. Beth called Bert on Tuesday and they met on Friday for the weekend funeral. -MM

Oh come on! Really? You won't finish this after such a good start?

Damn

I can’t fault the story, a full 5 stars.

Complicated and long, but well done.

Bill S.

Another terrific story from MindsMirror – I really love your approach. Can't wait to get on to Chapter 2; you've already given us a few clues of where this might be going and also inserted some new mysteries.

This has the makings of a fantastic story!!! Please finish it! Thank you

Well, I think It would be better if there was a part 2 but since you wrote this in 2015, I guess part 2 is not going to appear to soon.