by brunorivera
Well crafted and pleasant to read. The only thing you missed was two females with Ronny, but you can't have everything.
the emotions in the main protagonist, Kristy, seem disconnected or absent. Kristy gets bored with Laura and lesbianism, then Laura and Roxie get together but Kristy feels nothing. the Roxie/Ron breakup and she feels nothing. Kristy gets into Ron and she doesn't seem to feel anything. she marries Ron, has their child - and STILL no expression of emotion.
the rest is good, but unless Kristy is autistic, this lack of writing emotion is a real weakness.