All Comments on 'DHS 77'

I've been thinking of trying other genres lately. (This story is a bit of an inspiration.) The story created all kinds of emotions. It seems that power corrupts, doesn't it? I enjoyed this story a lot and thanks for all the effort you put into it!

Very imaginative. I can see Crichton doing the plot or someone like Harlan Coben doing the revenge.

I guess I'm saying this would make a great novel! Nice depth, good characterization.

Way to go! A change of pace is good for the soul.

Regards, DJ

This is not K.K.'s best work. I wanted to like the story but in the end, it left me unsatisfied and wondering what it was all about. Revenge? It was pretty uneven revenge if that was the story line. The subject used the same drug with which she was abused to manipulate her husband instead of resolving that problem in a way that left the man's self-respect intact. She indulged herself with a female sex slave for a while to punish that woman. In short, the heroine covered herself with the same slime her abusers did. I guess she did finally destroy the mechanism for abuse, but not until she had all the code words established and not until she got all the way through her agenda. K.K., I think the world of you, but this just wasn’t a well thought out plot. Please get “back to your roots,” and show us some of those fabulously written stories like you used to do.

The premise was excellent. The setup was great. What you had here was a potential novel-length plot. I just felt the last half was a bit hurried and didn't do justice to the possibilities.

It is rare when you find a plot on a porn site that is so rich in possibility. I'm extremely impressed with K.K.'s storyline and most of the execution thereof.

The minor criticism does not in anyway denigrate what was a truly original idea.

When I saw you had delved into the world of mind control, I almost past. However knowing full well what a great writer you are, I delved in. I loved it!! Very well thought out. Hmmmm! I'm not going to start doing things I have never been interested in now am I?? You surely didn't place a few subliminal catch phrases in this did you?

George

Northern California

There was more to this story than the subject matter and the sex scenes. A tale about unbridled power, revenge and control. I really saw it more as a morality tale. In any event, extremely well done, well written and well executed. Makes me question what little talent I thought I had.

this belongs in the sci-fi/fantasy category. and, yes, "mind control" is fantasy so it, too, ought to be subsumed under sci-fi/fantasy

kk is an excellent writer, so there's no quarrel over his writing ability

that's for certain. Well written too. Mostly it follows along coherently.

But why didn't I enjoy it?

I really cannot get properly into a story when there is no character to root for.

The only almost likeable character was Brian Carter, and Pam's husband was likely okay, but not involved enough nor painted much by KK to start to like.

Basically every character in this story was highly objectionable, and that's NOT entertainment.

Loved it. I'm glad to see you are out of the "unfaithful wife-revenge" mode you have been in for the last few stories. That theme has just been worked to death lately. I agree with some that there is a good novel in this idea, but you did more with it than I gould have wished for, given the space. Thanks.

This was a rollercaoster ride. It certainly would make a good weekly HBO or SHOTIME Series.

This has to be one of the best stories I've read! It has a good plot and story line, and realistic characters. It has all the ups, downs and curves of a novel in the making. I truely enjoyed every word and will most certainly be reading the rest of K.K.'s submissions.

My girlfriend is really into reading these together. Usually I have to wade through an ocean of disturbing, perverted, and sometimes physically sickening stories to get to some Romanic/Sexy ones. This story was perfect. It was well written, sexy with the whole control elements but not to the point where it was disgusting. Thank you for writing something that was sexy but still involved decent people and didn’t make me depressed to call myself a human being. Great Job!

This story had believable characters with real emotions. Really set it apart and I stayed up till 1am reading start-finish. I enjoyed it as a good story in itself. Keep writing great stories.

...I never got and erection and there lay the problem a good story with realistic characters and situations just lacking heat. It was literature not erotic literature. That said I still enjoyed it.

I too enjoyed the read. Typically I will leave a story if there are more than 3 or 4 pages listed (not ADHD, just that's not why I come to this site) but your story hooked me.

I was just so disappointed in the ending. I think a lot of the comments already listed are good, even the one about not getting an erection lol, but I truly was looking for a twist at the end. Take that as a compliment because the plot and build up was so good. And just plain old good writing too.

I read this til 1 am and when it was done i wanted more. Maybe a good over evil triumph fits here, but maybe not. Maybe there is more of this stuff around? I hope so ;)

I wasn't satisfied with the story, especially the ending. However, I did enjoy reading and certainly such a creative story deserves the 5 star rating I gave it.

This story once again confirms my feeling that you are one of the best writers on this site. Your hard work in putting together these stories is greatly appreciated, as they provide many hours of enjoyable reading.

Another tasty story by one of the best authors here. Loved the revenge and the subsequent moral decline of the protag who manages to salvage herself by doing the next right thing... loved it. Thanks!!

She-it man! This story is too close to the truth. Makes you cringe when you go to" eg"

shopping, Window shopping or just sitting at work? Suddenly you think what was I doing or how did I get here! JUST MAYBE SOMEONE HAS PLAYED WITH YOUR MIND AND BODY? FREAKS ME OUT! WELL FRIENDS IT DOES HAPPEN ? Fantastic story! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

This story played out very nicely. I loved the back and forth with the corrupting influence the power of the formula gave Pam (and her abusers prior). Well written right up to the ending. Easily a five star effort.

While there is some infidelity in this, I think this story would fit better in the SciFi/Fantasy category

It was a very interesting plot and written well.

You absolutely blew it by having Pam harm innocents.

She sexually abused her coworkers just because she could.

The worst was her vile rape of an innocent wife and mother by having her get a slimy asshole to fuck her in front of her husband!

Jim deserved some serious payback for his rape of her but his wife Barbara was innocent.

Pam is a deranged cunt that needs her brains blown out!

Pathetic attempt at an otherwise interesting story.

Don't usually like or read these stories but one is very well written and very enjoyable.

I agree with silentsound; there was a lot of unrealized potential for having Pam be a really strong force for good. Stories in the Ring of Gyges genre are never developed to the fullest extent because the power given to the protagonist is nearly unlimited and can't be reasonably controlled by an author. Plato's claim that the power of invisibility (for example) would corrupt even a perfectly good man is a compelling argument and difficult to manage in a story.

A damned near perfect story - never going too far off the rails, and always keeping the characters human enough to be relatable and believable.

I fail to see how it is revenge if the revengee doesn’t even realize he/she is being abused by their victim.

Rub the drug on their necks and tell them to go out and commit suicide in a very obvious way. Easy peasy. The End.

Epilogue: Pam was the most evil one of the entire bunch.