by JustPlainMerrie
This has the making of a terrific series. My daughter never had any friends like that. Well, actually, she had one, but we never did anything. LOL
You really have a talent for writting erotic stories... keep writing!!!
Hi JPM, I read your story with much interest and if turning a bloke on was your aim then it sure succeeded with this bloke. I'm an Aussie, many miles from you but sex is universal, isn't it?
I think your way you changed from girl/girl chat to male/female chat - hinting at incest should gather a very wide audience.
I prefer a bit more intimate detail. I'd also like you to show how differently the girls react to the same stimuli. It might only be miniscule but it adds variety to the scene. One girl salivates while the other girl waits for whatever it is that makes her tingle. Understand?
I think you are a competent erotic writer and I shall read the rest of your work and look forward to it.
Les.
PLEASE keep this story going. It's one of the best I've read here, not least because it not only has a great story line but it doesn't have the misspellings and grammatical errors which seem so common on this site. This is great!
My cock has never been so hard. I love this story and think you should keep writing. Thanks for the hardon!
Yeah, just plain beautiful. What a story. It is a very hot story. Do it again soon please. I want to know if you and Tiffany get a sexual relationship going, too.
Keep writing, girl. You have got my attention.
The title of this piece of fiction drew me in. Loved the story. No harsh repercussions and people casual enough about life as to incline your reader into wanting a little bit more.
Well done.