by RossDaniels
Not bad, although there were a number of distractions (e.g., from grammar and punctuation). May I suggest you either get an editor who really knows what she/he is doing, or learn more about serious writing. But, again, not bad. Tnx
Having her take control was good, but she didn't take enough control to suit my taste. I was hoping for a whole day's worth of control. She did do a great job of teasing him while he was bound, though.
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Labe sucking is an act that isn't mentioned nearly enough on Literotica, IMO. I'm sure our female readers would like more coverage of that. Some have nether lips directed connected to their clits. So, a tug on a lip is a tug on the clit.
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You did it well with:<br />
>> Then I moved to the side and began to trace my tongue along her slit, parting her lips as I moved my mouth slowly up and down. They were swollen with arousal, and I gently took one into my mouth and began to suck delicately.
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"Ohhhhhh, that feels so good," she moaned, and her approval just made me want to please her more. I ran my tongue along the inside of her other lip, then sucked it gently into my mouth. I continued to alternate, taking one swollen lip into my mouth, then the other until Christina was beginning to move her hips against me. <<
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And your description of how he tongued her pink flesh before touching her clit was mighty fine.
I loved this story! very sexy and erotic! I am looking forward to reading the rest of your work!
luci xxx