by Samuelx
great start! Then poof it ends? Give us a story or dont. Posting quickies can be good, but not when you expect more. You have made room for more; Please give it and re-edit to include original story. Together with another story it might make a really good one. I am not being mean here, the story was good just like a bottlerocket zip pop and done.
Abrupt ending. Is there more? Promised something good, then fizzled. Hope you continue the story.