by Tx Tall Tales
Your spelling is horrible. One word is "builders" not "builder's" A Second word is "Davis" not "Davis's"
The story was interesting, but not very graphic or erotic.
its erotica not the new yorker, if you want to critique someone's writing go elsewhere, i thought this was good, it made me laugh so it worked.
Should have expanded a bit.
The other guy finds she fucked the other reaper when she says "so you want to go again", then he leaves, you offer solace, and get a proper introduction to this lovely zombie.
Anonymous calling me on the spelling was dead on. I'm working on some other stories, and didn't give this one the edit or review I should have - just was inspired to write it from an overheard comment, and quick submitted it to get back to what I should have been working on. Sorry - especially bad to make the mistakes in the first line of the story - that would bother me if I was reading it!
Thanks for the comments, and I'll be more careful in the future.
Actually, I believe it's "the Davis'", to indicate you are talking about "the Davis couple"....just saying.
Tx Tall Tales,
You wrote Halloween party rivalries so nicely! Hot scene! I'm curious, can you divulge what the over-heard comment was that inspired this little tale?
~Luna
that TxTallTales is one of the absolute best on this site? Just read the first three paragraphs of this story. My god, if he's not a professional writer, then he sure as hell should be. The rhythm, syntax, character sketches, dialogue, it's all there. I have read everything he's posted here, and I don't even like the themes of most of his stories!
Still, themes are personal to the author, while good writing is universal. And simply put, TxTallTale's writing is just fucking awesome!
Keep up the INCREDIBLE work!
I really enjoy your work. Think you could do a follow up to this - like an after the party connection.
Stop Rehnquist - you're making me blush. (And that's REALLY hard to do.)
From the author of the Knox County series (I had to read the first 7 in one LONG sitting - just couldn't stop) and the excellent and well-deserved top ranking Lovin' Wives story Goin' Back Home Again - that's high praise indeed. I love your work as well. Goin' Back Home Again really spoke to the frustrated musician in me.
As for the comment - it was nothing earth shattering, just a guy commenting on a party where 2 people dressed the same and nobody could tell them apart. I swear there's a story idea in almost everything. If only I could type 120 wpm with no errors spelling or grammatically.
So true! I just had a reader challenge me to describe a seasonal dessert. I wrote a 3 page story from the idea. :) Sometimes even typing that fast doesn't help. But, I find my fingers fly faster than my pen. So to keep up with my thoughts, the computer suits my needs best.
Thanks for the explanation :)
~Luna
I really enjoyed this story. It was short and hot, the style fun and a little quirky. Although I'd love to see our narrator get into some more adventures, this was quite a satisfying little tale all by itself. A very stimulating Halloween read.
This story is a great humorous short. This author flows through this tongue in cheek like an FBI agent as a waiter in a Costra Nostra meeting. The humour is slow yet works up almost passing you then you are left holding a rabbit where a magician once performed. This author is smart crafty and very humorous. Thanks again for a masterpiece that could've been the start of a long series.
At first I thought it was going to be about the Real Grim Reaper making a call at the wrong address and grabbing the wrong guy. This was better.
To the two Anonymous commenters of grammar: it should actually be "the Davis' Halloween party" or, "The Davises threw a Halloween party."
Anyway, I just discovered Tx as an author and am very much enjoying the storytelling and writing :)
Not rape. Not at all! A great story. Now if only Reaper had snapped a couple of photos with his phone, and "anonymously" set up a rendezvous, using the photos for blackmail ....
It's only rape if it happens in real life :>
However this, was just a great, erotic, story. Why ya' gotta' be such a wet blanket :3
Keep up the great writing! Accidental Nudist Cabin got me hooked, I'm looking for more of the same!
It's a pity we don't have parties like these in my country. I'm sick of chasing my neighbour and he gets faster by the day since he's joined the sprinting club. Rape is no fun when you're poofed. But it's a stupid dream anyway. Where would I ever get a reaper costume like that one and what's the odds... Oh well.
Shot for story. Well done.
This is awesome, you should write another chapter!
You should definitely write another chapter or two of this...A great story.
Great build up, terrific would be clincher - great shame about the somewhat routine close. The writing and build up were class - thanks!
He'd slide into the backdoor or at least she'd have time to clean him off, oh well, maybe next time. Signed: BTW
Top notch.
Reminded me of that highly romantic scene in "Revenge of the Nerds".
I like “less is more.” No need to embarrass her, or get the police involved.
As for the rape complaint…. I get that, and I don’t enjoy stories in which one person is hurt or malevolently coerced. Nevertheless, this is written for a fantasy sex site that has whole categories for mind control, nonconsent, and incest, so I’m not sure we can get too judgy when the involved participants walk away with smiles on their faces.
You should disallow anonymous comments. Is that possible? I mean if someone has a strong opinion on a story that should have the guts to be transparent.
I'm referring to the "rape" commenter. It didn't feel like a rape story to me, just a sex fantasy.
sometimes a case of mistaken identity can be a really good thing !! how many red blooded men can honestly say they wouldn't do this if it was them in this situation ??