by SirSinn
Horny & funny, not an easy trick to pull off. Please let's have some more, I mean will Emily actually shoot her old man?
Sorry but this ended terribly. You took a silly premise, which was funny and sexy, and changed it midway to something else, then slathered on a bunch of self-referential humour, which didn't match and wasn't funny.
It was a great story of haunting and possession but the part of the nurse coming in and the three of them having a conversation during sex was just stupid. the story was great up to then even the murder plot. and having sex with her adult son's, that was great.
I tried writing something that was a bit silly - - some liked it, some didn't, but at least I tried. :)
It started well enough, but...
Well, at least one thing was right in this 'story'
Who WRITES this shit!?
Great story! Only thing is I wish you would've written the filth that the pornstar was saying to the sons. And I loved the part when the secretary came in and didn't bat an eye! I only wish she would've said that she loved working for a doctor who treats his patients this way. Maybe you could write a story about a boob job clinic that specializes in XXL boob jobs, the doctors routinely fuck the patients, the staff encourage the girls who come in to go really big, and the ads for the place make fun of flat chested girls and naturals. Again, though, great story!
It was certainly the silliest story I've read, erotic or not. So, well done? I suppose?
Considering how much you took the piss here, it sounds be classified as Fetish. :-D