by bamadude55
very good start to the story. I really enjoyed the emotion the two showed each other. I can't wait to read what the two get into in the future chapters. Always great to read a good love story
My God, that ending actually took my breath away.
I can't explain it.
I am so looking forward to the next part.
You really need an editor. You kept missing words, and it rather disrupted the flow of your story. That's why you only got 3 stars, instead of 4 or 5. Other than that, it was decent.
You authors keep posting incomplete stories here. Very frustrating to come to a turning point in the story and then with a "To Be Continued" it ends with no resolution to the plot. Very annoying. Please finish your stories before you post them.
I always love a love story and I really enjoyed this one. That's why I was disappointed that you haven't written the next chapter yet! Can't wait to read about the lesbian aunt being deflowered...sounds like fun ;o))
Only read maybe half first page so far & noticed it jumped from the guys 18th bday to 21st in a matter of paragraphs
Little did I know but my 18th birthday was going to change my life forever....... ........................... Tonight was going to be different. I didn't know why but I had a feeling something special was going to happen. Maybe the moons were aligning together at the right moment, I didn't know why but I was feeling real confident that tonight was going to be my night.
First though, I had to endure the usual family birthday party. Mom was making a big fuss because it was my 21st birthday
Great build up to the story. Not many people do it that well. Looking forward to the next part!