by Moondrift
However, your last few stories have shown little of the delicate and thoughtful charm of your earlier pieces. Now they are rather crude, not just in the setting but in the way they are crafted. I miss the old moondrift and the other names in which you wrote by. Maybe one day, you'll discover him again, until then, I am afraid I won't be reading much more of your work. Once you tasted the artistry of your earlier works, the pale repeated imitations really leave a bitter taste in your mouth.
I haven't read the rest.
I'm too drunk now, and I have issues!
Nice story but far to bogged down with correct English & attempt at showing how literal you are, far more concentration needed on the story moreso than the literary correctness
It's this kind of playfulness you create in your stories that keeps me coming back, Moondrift. Wonderful story. Sexy, steamy, funny, naughty--everything I love. Keep writing them this way and you have a fan for life! ~ Candlelight062
but I concure with; 09/28/05 by Anonymous in Australia, when they said; Concentrate on the story, Nice story but far to bogged down with correct English & attempt at showing how literal you are, far more concentration needed on the story more so than the literary correctness. This is the only reason I gave you a 25.
It seems only fair that those who would criticize the author about writing style should at least know the difference between "literal" and "LITERATE" Of course, this is just my opinion. But there are sufficient other stories of their genre, 'strokers,' for their satisfaction.
It made me smile. Your humour is appreciated. A previous Aussie said it was crude. No way! They must have had to many XXXX the night before!
I notice you haver never posted a story on this site but you feel you have the right to criticise this authors writing.
You put "Nice story but far to bogged down"
If you, who criticises others words, should know that the phrase should be "far too bogged down"
This is all this site needs is an illiterate critic.
Please stop.