by Ghostwalker
But still a pretty good result. A happy ending.
Little to complain about. Great idea to re-close with Gail (twice) and show that forgiveness is always recommended. Hot sex and you made sure he learned well.
While most of the stories of other authors is pretty much "wham, bam, thank you m'am", this story (both Ch.01 and Ch.02) had enough content to intriguing. While I deeply enjoyed the story overall, I couldn't help but wonder how "Gail" figured out how Erik was the father was to "Dani's" baby? However, it was nice to see that the story had a happy ending, regardless. Thanks to the author for sharing his story with us readers.
++stormychilde++
Well written. You could have done a WHAM BAM THANK YOU MAM. Yet you wove a story that was interesting, and erotic!
You set up all these plot strings and foreshadowed a lot of different things. Then completely dropped them and finished the story in a seemingly rushed and unsatisfying way.